The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice thoughts- I had a little trouble pulling them all out. Maybe work for shorter sentences- to give it more punch. I liked the descriptions.
10/17/05
I agree with others. Very powerful message but needs shorter sentences.
Good choice of a vital scriptural theme to share with your readers.
10/17/05
I loved the detail and descriptiveness of your article. Run on sentences could be shortened, still blending well with the beautiful clarity that you have nicely presented. It is a wonderful truth. God bless ya, littlelight
10/18/05
Good thoughts; the sentences had great descriptions. I think in the tightness of these submissions, the longer sentences bother some, but I found them workable, not at all Faulkner style. Thank you for submitting.