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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Outbreak (04/07/11)

TITLE: Courage Gathered
By David Story
04/11/11


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She was surrounded by darkness save for the one beam of light that from time to time shone through.

She was hungry, and thirsty.

She was scared.

And even though she desperately wanted to go toward the light, fear had completely gripped her, and had kept her from going forward.

Slowly she moved back.

Away from the light.

Further into the darkness.

Her body slammed into a hard structure behind her, and suddenly she felt trapped. The realization that her only way of escape to safety was to walk to the light was just beginning to make its way into her line of thought when the unspeakable happened.

The light ceased to exist.

She took a deep breath as she looked around in the darkness. She could barely make out different objects around her. They were objects of different size and shape, and to her they appeared as monsters.

And fear gripped her even more.

She sat down and cried.

The light returned and she stood. It now had her full attention.

Voices.

She heard voices.

The sounds gave her a feeling of comfort, of safety. But still, to make her way toward the voices, toward the light, toward the unknown, was almost more than she could bear.

But the fear of the darkness outweighed her fear of the unknown and in a sudden rush she could not bear to be where she was for another moment.

With a determined and stout resolution she made up her mind.

She would indeed venture.

Beyond the darkness.

Beyond the fear.

Into the light.

-----

“Mom. I think she’s coming.”

Susan whispered to her daughter. “Not too loud, honey. We don’t want to scare her anymore than she already is.”

Little Suzie was on her knees. She knelt by the bed and slowly pulled the covers away from the floor. Susan continued to shine the beam of the flashlight underneath.

“I see her, Mommy. I see her!”

Susan smiled. “Call her.”

“Kitty. C’mon, Kitty.”

Suzie used her arm and reached as far as she could under the bed. With one quick sweeping movement she whisked the little cat from under her bed.

“I’ve got her! I’ve got her!” She held the small animal with both arms. “She’s shaking, Mommy.”

“Yeah, I guess she’s had quite the scare.”

Suzie smiled and continued with the hugs. “You’re safe, now, Kitty. You’re safe, and I’ll never let you go.”

-----

Come close to God, and God will come close to you.
- James 4:8a (NLT)



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Carol Penhorwood 04/14/11
Cleverly done!
Belinda Borradaile04/14/11
Oh this is too precious!
How much like that little kitty I feel at times.
Helen Curtis04/17/11
Very nice!
Sharlyn Guthrie04/18/11
Very cute story. You did a good job of revealing just a little of the setting at a time.
Lillian Rhoades 04/19/11
I liked how you used the element of suspense and surprise to move your story along. I found the use of "she" a bit repetitive.
Animal lovers willl smile at this one.:-)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/19/11
What a ride you took me. at first I naturally thought of dying, then being born and I loved the surprise of the frightened kitten. Oh how often I'm an afraid kitty. Well-done!
Debra Hindman04/27/11
David, you inched us to a good outcome...light! Thank you for keeping it interesting for us...and then the kitty! :)