The Official Writing Challenge
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03/17/11
Heaven is being with Dad, isn't it. The only part I struggled with was no bugs in heaven. God made some awesome bugs. I hope they will be in heaven. Maybe no more hurtful stings.
03/19/11
Absolutely beautiful! Vivid imagery in a tale that touches the soul!
03/19/11
Great writing and storyline. Love the MC voice. Good job.
03/21/11
I love your simple pictures and the natural warmth that greets the pain in both their hearts. Picking up on Sydney's point though, everything will 'bee' in perfect balance in heaven, so I can imagine bugs there - all 'beehiving' themselves. There may even be room for bugs that have been so morbidly depressed that they have committed insecticide(?)
03/23/11
This was a delight to read I fell in love with your Characters. The line about squash and Daddy's heart being attacked made me smile and are exactly something a kid would say. You've probably seen it by now but it's break not brake, once you fix that it would be perfect for a Sunday school handout.