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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Flowers (10/03/05)

TITLE: Floral Example
By Brenda Kern
10/10/05


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She rises with the early morning dawn, and her only thought, the entire focus of her existence, is to reach toward him. Oh, how she needs his warmth, his touch, his infilling of strength and sustenance! She needs him so much she leans in his direction!

She doesn't worry about the day ahead, because she knows her needs will be met. In fact, she is so consumed with her passion for all he brings to her life that she isn't aware of much else.

When reached by his rays, each like a tender caress, she lifts her head higher.

As his warmth penetrates her exterior, she expands and matures, until her childlike trust in him causes her to move from bud to bloom, opening wide to experience him more.

His influence changes her color, and makes her vibrant, eye-catching, and lovelier by the moment.

Other things nourish her, as well: she must be well rooted, and experience rain and wind and difficulty to truly grow tall and strong. She drinks, and sways, and abides without concern; she knows he is there, and his perfect luminosity will renew her again.

She has been thoroughly equipped to do what's asked of her, and she does "her thing" so well! Her beauty stirs the souls of people around her, not because of her appearance in and of itself, but because her very existence indicates intelligent design, and the involvement of a loving Creator.

Her willingness to be just what God would have her be inspires artists, provides expression to the romantic, and consoles the heavy hearts of those who mourn.

And as if the visual splendor she provides to the world weren't enough, she also offers up a fragrance that dazzles those who are lucky enough to smell it.

More importantly, though, she lifts up her appearance, her aroma, and her very self as a sacrifice to the Lord, the One she adores and worships with all her being, for she needs Him even more than the sun He provides.

She may be just a flower, but she's His flower.

Lord, let me be like her.


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Karen Deikun10/10/05
Nicely written and a wonderful message.
Linda Watson Owen10/10/05
Effective comparison using the flower image. I'm wondering how it would work to use the name of a flower instead of 'she' and 'her'. Iris? Rose? even Flora? etc. Just a thought.
B Brenton10/11/05
Awww, wonderful. I am clapping enthusiastically. Or at least in my heart anyhow. Nice name, perfectly fit.
Brandi Roberts10/11/05
Wow, this is incredible. I disagree with the previous comment about using a name. Sometimes using names takes away from the story, and I think that you chose wisely, especially since the use of "she" and "her" correlates so perfectly with your last line. Thank you for sharing!
Beth Muehlhausen10/11/05
I'm finding myself in an introspective spot as I read this...so this line especially spoke to me: "Her willingness to be just what God would have her be inspires artists, provides expression to the romantic, and consoles the heavy hearts of those who mourn."
Karen Ward10/12/05
Great comparison, Encouraging us to embrace the simplicity of our relationship with God, instead of dwelling on the complexities as we so often do.
Suzanne R10/13/05
I love the way you finished - what a challenge. Well done!
Jan Ackerson 10/13/05
Your first sentence is perfection, and an entire devotional all by itself. Beautifully done; the only spot that jarred me, as a reader, was the phrase "...does 'her thing'...". This introduces a bit of idiom in an otherwise very lyrical piece. But that's very minor; this is definitely a favorite of mine this time around.
Anita Neuman10/13/05
I agree with Jan - "does her thing" was a bit of a distraction from the lyrical flow of this piece. But this was a WONDERFUL way to start my day. Simply beautiful!
Joanne Malley10/13/05
Beautifully done! Perfect flow; great word choices. :)
Shari Armstrong 10/13/05
Lovely :)
Lynda Lee Schab 10/14/05
Outstanding entry. Loved the prose, the perspective, the closing statement. Wonderfully creative piece. A strong contender, I'm sure.
Blessings, Lynda
Julianne Jones10/14/05
Beautiful and inspirational. Loved it.
Val Clark10/16/05
Beautifully written and engaging.
terri tiffany10/16/05
I too loved the first paragraph most! It took me a second to realize you were talking about a flower and then I thought how well you described her!