The Official Writing Challenge
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10/10/05
Nicely written and a wonderful message.
10/10/05
Effective comparison using the flower image. I'm wondering how it would work to use the name of a flower instead of 'she' and 'her'. Iris? Rose? even Flora? etc. Just a thought.
10/11/05
Awww, wonderful. I am clapping enthusiastically. Or at least in my heart anyhow. Nice name, perfectly fit.
10/11/05
Wow, this is incredible. I disagree with the previous comment about using a name. Sometimes using names takes away from the story, and I think that you chose wisely, especially since the use of "she" and "her" correlates so perfectly with your last line. Thank you for sharing!
10/11/05
I'm finding myself in an introspective spot as I read this...so this line especially spoke to me: "Her willingness to be just what God would have her be inspires artists, provides expression to the romantic, and consoles the heavy hearts of those who mourn."
10/12/05
Great comparison, Encouraging us to embrace the simplicity of our relationship with God, instead of dwelling on the complexities as we so often do.
10/13/05
I love the way you finished - what a challenge. Well done!
10/13/05
Your first sentence is perfection, and an entire devotional all by itself. Beautifully done; the only spot that jarred me, as a reader, was the phrase "...does 'her thing'...". This introduces a bit of idiom in an otherwise very lyrical piece. But that's very minor; this is definitely a favorite of mine this time around.
10/13/05
I agree with Jan - "does her thing" was a bit of a distraction from the lyrical flow of this piece. But this was a WONDERFUL way to start my day. Simply beautiful!
10/13/05
Beautifully done! Perfect flow; great word choices. :)
10/13/05
Lovely :)
10/14/05
Outstanding entry. Loved the prose, the perspective, the closing statement. Wonderfully creative piece. A strong contender, I'm sure.
Blessings, Lynda
10/14/05
Beautiful and inspirational. Loved it.
10/16/05
Beautifully written and engaging.
10/16/05
I too loved the first paragraph most! It took me a second to realize you were talking about a flower and then I thought how well you described her!