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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Eternity (03/10/11)

TITLE: Sweet Sixteen
By Brian Haugrud
03/12/11


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The door flew open and she ran outside,
While tears just filled her eyes.
Just like many times before,
Her parents ignored her cries.

She wanted to go out that night,
With friends out on the town.
So very sure they lacked insight,
Their goal to tie her down.

The night was young and so she fled.
The city was not to far.
Out on the road with thumb held high,
The first guy stopped his car.

She hopped right in without a thought.
That danger could be near.
So down the road to city lights,
She traveled without fear.

The night grew dark as lights would fade.
A lump came to her throat.
The city now so far behind,
She didn’t have a coat.

He stopped the car out in the trees.
No people were around.
He pulled her from the car that night,
And pushed her to the ground.

She screamed in fear that life would end.
Or worse than that, she’d live.
He told her to take off her cloths.
He wanted her to give.

A light shone out from darkness bright.
Her dad for all to see.
He took her home away from fright.
Which seemed like eternity.


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Noel Mitaxa 03/20/11
A very busy rhythm that keeps the suspense rolling, though it seems to end more abruptly than it should have (to me.)
Beth LaBuff 03/22/11
The "world" is not a safe haven. This was nicely rhymed, emotion-filled, AND a great warning.
Amanda Brogan03/23/11
Yikes! This had me scared for the girl! I was cheering for her Dad in the end. Great lesson that parents know what's best.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/23/11
This gives me chills running down my back and my heart aches for all runaways and their families. Little red ink you used to instead of too in the third verse. But you did a great job on a difficult subject that I'm sure way too many can relate to.