The Official Writing Challenge
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03/20/11
A very busy rhythm that keeps the suspense rolling, though it seems to end more abruptly than it should have (to me.)
03/22/11
The "world" is not a safe haven. This was nicely rhymed, emotion-filled, AND a great warning.
03/23/11
Yikes! This had me scared for the girl! I was cheering for her Dad in the end. Great lesson that parents know what's best.
This gives me chills running down my back and my heart aches for all runaways and their families. Little red ink you used to instead of too in the third verse. But you did a great job on a difficult subject that I'm sure way too many can relate to.