The Official Writing Challenge
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03/05/11
Oh, this is good! I loved how you connected the two stories.

The beginning was confusing. It almost seemed to switch from third person to first person. In your second paragraph, I would have said something like "The other traders and I."

I loved your descriptions of the healings. I'd never before really thought about how overwhelming that first moment of sight or sound must have been.
03/06/11
Creative take on the topic. I like how you put the two stories together. Good work.
03/07/11
An interesting read and a creative approach on the topic.