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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Time-consuming (02/24/11)

TITLE: as the sands do fall
By Jim McWhinnie
02/27/11


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grain by grain the sands do fall,
relentlessly, as if time itself had no mercy in her heart.
and as we watch, the sands of days gone by,
gather more and more,
in a growing mountain of what will be no more,
some are moments turned to sweet memories,
some are moments turned to sad regrets,
some are moments never lived,
now lost in the winds of what might have been.
oh, the sands that do remain,
they slip away one by one,
in ever hastening pace,
urging me, taunting me, tempting me,
to quicken now this desperate race
to consume the remains of this dying day,
in a frantic way,
to fill this this lingering dusk with all the things iíve left undone,
but then a breeze blows in from an unseen realm,
as smoke drifts in from a distant fire,
to slow my soul and the glass of sand,
drawing me into that immortal pause
where i once more find that timeless place
that lives among all the mortal moments of our lives,
the place where time becomes eternity.


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Benjamin Graber03/03/11
I think I know who wrote this. :-) I'm curious - did you purposely make the poem one sentence? It has a neat affect; it goes well with the constant flowing of time. Great poem - I like the pictures you presented here.
Charla Diehl 03/03/11
This short piece packs a nice punch. Very worthy read and great use of words throughout.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/05/11
I love the imagagery in your poem.
Rachel Phelps03/06/11
The flow created by the single sentence is very intriguing, and your expressive style is excellent. Well done.
Bonnie Bowden03/06/11
I like the descriptive words and the meter of the poem. Time is always shifting and changing.

Noel Mitaxa 03/08/11
I like the lift in your perspective, which builds throughout your first verse...