The Official Writing Challenge
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02/25/11
Ha! Yeah, take that Dark One!

But seriously, I really got into this story. In the beginning my eyes were wide, glittering. Then, when the Dark One came into the picture, my eyes narrowed, brows furrowed.

Magnificent job hooking me in and keeping me captivated. Fabulous job showing progression of technology, in one tiny paragraph. LOVED it.
03/02/11
Very well done. I was engaged throughout.
03/02/11
I was wondering where it was going and then you got me at the end. Nice transitions from the past to the century and still a good message that we can so easily forget in all the new changes of this decade. Great reminder-I enjoyed the read!