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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Week(s) (02/10/11)

TITLE: The How To Monologue
By Henry Clemmons
02/16/11


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So this is where Jesusí was buried?
Amazing,
   He came back to life in here,
   and left death behind,
   in this place.
Wow.

What will it cost to spend the night?
Yes,
   right here in the tomb.
Is that all?

How about two nights?
Even better.

Three?
This is so very cool.
I canít believe itís so affordable.

How about seven days and nights?
Yes,
   right here in the tomb.
I can afford that.
Itís a deal.

What?
I have to supply my own linen and bedding?
And the stone has to stay where it is?
You mean I canít close it at night?
No fire, lanterns Ö flashlights?
How about a glow worm,
   lightning bugs maybe?
Whew, thatís good news,
   I donít much care for the dark.
You donít happen to sell any,
   do you?
No,
   not even one flickering bug?
Hmmmm.

Why do I want to stay?
Well,
   Iíve heard when Jesus departed the tomb He left some of my favorite things behind.

No,
   I donít want all of my sins back,
   just a few.

What do you mean theyíre not here?
Where are they?
Under the what?
Whose?

Listen,
   I can't go another week behaving completely.
Iím still a good guy,
   attend church,
   occasionally,
   tell my wife I love her,
   when I have to,
   and go to work.

I know that,
   but He might have left a few behind.
Iím bored.
Yes,
   I would spend seven nights in this tomb for a few sins.

Look,
   I can behave a few days,
   but a whole week;
   forget it.
Iím going crazy.

I know this is an important place,
   but Heís not here anymore.

Itís like this;
   on Sunday Iím good,
   Monday and Tuesday, still going strong,
   by Wednesday though, Iím starting to fade,
   and Thursday and Friday Iím dying for a cigarette and a drink.
Iíd repent all day Saturday and then go to church again on Sunday,
   but I canít sin without my sin.
Iím not wanting a harlot,
   just yet anyway,
   I donít want to kill anybody.
I just want a few of my sins back.

What do you mean, killing again?
No,
   I wouldnít want you to hang from that cross Ö
   again Ö

What?
Who?
You are?


You are.


I was kidding about the harlot,
   and the cigarette and drink.
Yes,
   Iíll stop lying.

I can get up off the ground now?
Are you sure?
You donít have a lightning bolt hiding behind your back,
   do you?
I know that wasnít funny,
   and understand you donít need a lightning bolt;
   Iím sorry,
   very, very sorry.

Yes,
   I can see where it isnít that great a deal,
   staying here,
   and would be very expensive in a non-monetary kind of way.
You have a genius way of making that clear.

Amazing.

So you think itís amazing too?
Howís that?
I see.
People believe you rose from the dead,
   say they believe in you,
   and then want to sneak back their sins again.

I canít believe the extremes some people would take.
The extremes I Ö

I Ö
   donít know what to say.

No,
   I donít want my sins back.

Thank you.

So Iím not the only one?
What line?
Wow,
   theyíre backed up past the horizon.

Very sad,
   indeed.

Yes I agree,
   you canít get much done staying here all day.

Can I help?
You know,
   tell them how ridicules it is to want their sins back.
I can!

How?


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Anita van der Elst02/19/11
Yes! Out of the box & out of the tomb! I really liked this. Very different. And I can relate to the kind of inner dialogue the MC is having.
Glynis Becker 02/19/11
So interesting and clever! Love the voice and the take on the topic is so unique. Great writing.
Yvonne Blake 02/19/11
The one-sided converstation is very creative!
Catrina Bradley 02/19/11
I love it!!
Benjamin Graber02/20/11
I really like the "flavor" of this one, Henry! You did a great job with this monologue; the progression is excellent!
Tracy Nunes 02/20/11
Very creative, different. It's not easy to make a one sided dialgoue two dimensional but you did it.
Helen Curtis02/20/11
This works so well! I love the message portrayed, (and the line "I can get up off the floor now?" - very funny). Great job!
Margaret Kearley 02/21/11
Hard-hitting, deeply thought-provoking and brilliant. By the time I reach 'People believe you rose from the dead,
say they believe in you,
and then want to sneak back their sins again,' I have a lump in my throat. Why do we do it? The price has been fully paid for those who have believed. Thank you for this wonderful reminder.

Rachel Phelps02/21/11
Let me pause to take a deep breath here. This was simply fabulous. Unique, driven, and oh-so-true for all of us. I hope to see this on top come Thursday!
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/22/11
I enjoy any writing from your amazingly creative mind. This is quite special.
Lollie Hofer 02/22/11
Unique and entertaining with a great message. I like how your mc used the same words to back out of his predicament as going into it. It was like walking down a path and giving a blow-by-blow description of what you see but then doing it again in reverse when you walk back up the path...hope that made sense. Anyway, I liked this a lot.
Amanda Brogan02/22/11
Amazing! I love the metaphor of wanting to go back to the deadness of the tomb, back to where our sins were buried when we accepted Jesus. He released us from that death! Why, indeed, would we want to go back?

You always have a fresh and interesting way of getting someone to think.

Great ending also! It was like ending with a challenge ...
Amanda Brogan02/24/11
Congratulations!
Rachel Phelps02/24/11
I'm so glad to see this on the EC list. Well deserved placement. What a moving poem.
Melanie Kerr 02/24/11
Pure genius, Henry - I wiah I had written it. It was so imaginative and I heard echoes in my own heart! You monologued well.
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/24/11
Congratulations on placing with this really great poem, Henry. I love seeing your name in lights!
Bonnie Bowden02/24/11
I loved the message and monologue. I couldn't have said it any better.

Congratulations on your EC award. I love to read your pieces, so much creativity.
Loren T. Lowery02/25/11
The conflict is palpable and real. The honesty enough to still a crowd. Now that is really, really good work! Congratulations, Henry C.