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02/17/11
I can't even begin to imagine the heartbreak!
02/18/11
Oh, the heartbreak. Wow! You did an excellent job of conveying what she was feeling and sensing all the way through. I liked the hope in the last two stanzas.
02/18/11
Lump in my throat too. I liked the short phrases & that each 4th line tells us something about the speakerís heart. Then the one line about the little oneís heart, sort of symbolic of her short life.
02/19/11
So sad, but honestly penned. I liked the way you used the heart at the end of each stanza. It's amazing how trong the heart is. Loved the message. Great job. You had a plan and executed it and created the emotion you wanted in your reader. A success.
02/19/11
Ahhhh... *tears for all those who have suffered the death of a child*
02/19/11
I love the short, but powerful, lines. I found myself racing through your poem, my heart alternately rejoicing and weeping. The ending leaves me with a sense of peace. A very effective work.
02/20/11
Very well done. So sad and poignant. The short phrases flow so well and the whole piece makes my mommy heart just break too! Fantastic.
02/20/11
This would be so hard to go through! I really liked the ways you expressed the different feelings of the heart in each stanza!
02/20/11
Much power packed into a short space. Very well done.
02/21/11
Heartbreaking but wonderfully written. Sadness so beautifully expressed.
02/21/11
So stark and heart-rending. Excellent! Well done on this awful topic.
02/22/11
You brought me to tears with this one, as friends of ours went through this less than a year ago. A beautiful ending, and a really powerful piece of writing.