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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Week(s) (02/10/11)

TITLE: My Heart
By Kellie Henningsen
02/16/11


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Two weeks late
The timerís ticking
Two lines appear
My heart jumps

Eight weeks now
Morning sickness stays
When will it leave
My heart sinks

Twelve weeks in
Iím feeling good
Is this for real
My heart trembles

Eighteen weeks
Ultrasound day comes
Is all ok
My heart flutters

The tech works
She says itís a girl
But now she frowns
My heart fears

A doctorís called
Whispers exchanged
A cloud moves in
My heart shakes

Iím sorry
A serious defect
Wonít live past birth
My heart breaks

Options given
Advice pours out
Comfort lacking
My heart explodes

Terminate
I wonít listen
I love her too much
My heart doubles

ďHow far along?Ē
Iím twenty eight weeks
ďCongratulations!Ē
My heart cries

Strangers smile
Iím uncomfortable
Kicks from within
My heart warms

Laborís begun
No baby Not now
Youíre safe with me
My heart clings

Laborís strong
No medication
I feel her leave me
My heart denies

Thereís no smiles
Only pity
They put her on me
My heart melts

Sheís perfect
I gaze in her eyes
With one breathe
Her heart stops

I canít let go
I rock her and hum
Thereís movement about
My heart focuses

Theyíre reaching now
No Iím not ready
They say itís time
My heart bleeds

Iím alone
Itís hard to breathe
Everything hurts
My heart struggles

Weeks pass
Grief travels onward
God shows Himself
My heart hopes

Life has purpose
She had hers
I have mine
My heart remembers


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Carol Penhorwood 02/17/11
I can't even begin to imagine the heartbreak!
Lollie Hofer 02/18/11
Oh, the heartbreak. Wow! You did an excellent job of conveying what she was feeling and sensing all the way through. I liked the hope in the last two stanzas.
Anita van der Elst02/18/11
Lump in my throat too. I liked the short phrases & that each 4th line tells us something about the speakerís heart. Then the one line about the little oneís heart, sort of symbolic of her short life.
Henry Clemmons02/19/11
So sad, but honestly penned. I liked the way you used the heart at the end of each stanza. It's amazing how trong the heart is. Loved the message. Great job. You had a plan and executed it and created the emotion you wanted in your reader. A success.
Yvonne Blake 02/19/11
Ahhhh... *tears for all those who have suffered the death of a child*
Catrina Bradley 02/19/11
I love the short, but powerful, lines. I found myself racing through your poem, my heart alternately rejoicing and weeping. The ending leaves me with a sense of peace. A very effective work.
Glynis Becker 02/20/11
Very well done. So sad and poignant. The short phrases flow so well and the whole piece makes my mommy heart just break too! Fantastic.
Benjamin Graber02/20/11
This would be so hard to go through! I really liked the ways you expressed the different feelings of the heart in each stanza!
Jody Day 02/20/11
Much power packed into a short space. Very well done.
Margaret Kearley 02/21/11
Heartbreaking but wonderfully written. Sadness so beautifully expressed.
Rachel Phelps02/21/11
So stark and heart-rending. Excellent! Well done on this awful topic.
Helen Curtis02/22/11
You brought me to tears with this one, as friends of ours went through this less than a year ago. A beautiful ending, and a really powerful piece of writing.