The Official Writing Challenge
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Great message effectively delivered. Of course I like the short choppy lines. I enjoyed the ebb and flow of the piece. Nicely done. An enjoyable journey.
02/18/11
Beautiful writing. The rhythm was perfect and the message is undeniable.
02/19/11
Interesting!
(I could add other stanzas to go with other moods - happy butterfly, grumpy bear, etc.)
Nice ending!
02/22/11
I agree with Henry - I like the short lines and how they flowed. Great message in there as well.