The Official Writing Challenge
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This is good. Loved the emotion of the MC, loved the wine, the prayers for the non-believer. This is really good. The repetition, “‘Disorder,’ he says.” works nicely. This has a good flow and is believable. Well done!
02/21/11
I was becoming more and more tense all the way through this piece. Held my interest from the word go. Loved the last two paragraphs. Captivating!
02/21/11
I could feel the anguish of your mc throughout the story. It felt real...like it was a real life-experience.
02/23/11
You've helped me through my personal lack of estrogen to sense your MC's emotional roller coaster. God at work bringing life to full term in spite of the self-doubt. A very powerful portrayal.
02/23/11
Spellbound to the end where I sighed in relief and cheered for the mc. Great job!
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