The Official Writing Challenge
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02/12/11
This is an original take on the topic and very sad. Your descriptions were excellent and I got right inside the house with the MC. Well done.
Many of us have never seen the inside of a hoarder's house except on TV. I have unfortunately been inside someone's house after his spouse died, and you did an outstanding job capturing the details and the fear of letting go,of suffering another loss.
02/17/11
Excellent title for this well-written story. Perfect voice for your mc. I have a Polynesian brother-in-law: you nailed the accent and "pigeon" English. I like how you gave insight to your mc's dilemna (sp?) without putting her down for it. Well done. I hope this one sits well in the judging.
02/17/11
Yay! I'm glad to see the judges agreed this deserved recognition.
02/17/11
Congratulations on your win!
As a home health nurse I can relate to your mc, having seen many such scenarios & you depicted it all well.
Your choice of descriptions hit the mark. You took me there. You evoked compassion for this dear lady in her sad and painful life. Congratulations.