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Had to read this a couple times. At first I thought all the thoughts were the past and present memories of the woman dying. I think your last sentence would have been a great opening one--a clue to the reader that there are actually two MC's in this piece. That said, I enjoyed the contrast in the voices and the picture words throughout.
One comes, one goes, and such are the cherished memories of our life shared within family.
Two lives joined--one by new life on earth, one by new life in heaven.

I am glad you added the last line; I wasn't exactly sure how the baby and grandmother were connected until then.