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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: 24 Hours (01/27/11)

TITLE: Fairy Tale Clothing
By Benjamin Graber
01/27/11


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In the morning you don
A fairy tale lifestyle,
Where you become the princess
And everyone bows to your will.

The fairy godmother of your own pride
Swaps your rags for riches,
And suddenly
All homage is yours;
All sacrifices are placed
Upon your altar.

Your empurpled gown sweeps past
The dusty tiles
Where once your bare knees pressed
In service.
Now you scorn to stoop so low;
You will not even spare a glance
To the corners you knew so well.

The souls you used to call your friends
Now serve your meals;
They wait on you with gentle smiles,
With just a hint of longing
And hunger.

But what are they to all that now is yours?
The world opens her purse
To you,
And you take what you desire
With greedy fingers
Now decorated with diamonds.

But as you gorge yourself
On the feast of your vanity,
You may want to pause
And reflect;
Consider the dress you’ll wear,
Lest you shall be stripped
Naked,
When the clock strikes twelve.


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Charla Diehl 02/04/11
Insightful and chilling to some degree. Your title fit this piece perfectly. Well done.
Bonnie Bowden02/04/11
Excellent poem. One day we will be judged for everything we've done here on earth. I'm sure some of us will be stripped of the superficial finery and left pretty bare.
Glynis Becker 02/05/11
Great descriptions and beautiful, if sad, imagery. And what a powerful message. Wonderful writing!
Amanda Brogan02/10/11
Wow! I've never thought about the fairy tale in the light before. Love the metaphor here! Big congratulations on your win!
Amanda Brogan02/10/11
Um, I meant "in that light." :)
Rachel Phelps02/10/11
Really excellent imagery. Congratulations on your EC!
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/10/11
Congratulations on EC for your beautiful insightful poem.
Margaret Kearley 02/10/11
This is so powerful Benjamin and such a warning against yielding to the pride that so doggedly pursues ou footsteps. Thank you for writing so clearly.
Loren T. Lowery02/10/11
Congratulations and reminding us all of our "Cinderella" moments. Loren
Ann Grover02/10/11
Brilliant! Thought-provoking, deep.
Lollie Hofer 02/10/11
I could see this unfolding from beginning to end. I like the strong images and how well the words flowed. Congratulations on your EC.
Michael Throne02/11/11
Wonderful poem. Strong phrasing, concise and to the point, great ending, great lesson. Well deserved EC!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/30/11
Wow! This has so many layers. At least 100 people could read it and take away a different message that God intended just for them. That takes true talent and a tremendous amount of faith to know God will use your words in a way that is desperately needed at this exact moment in time.Your talent gives me goosebumps.