The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 492 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
01/29/11
Do we assume that this poor guy found his wife in a compromising position? This story kept me reading. I wanted to know where he was and why. You definitely showed how he ended up in the state he was in. Not an unusual story, but well told.
01/31/11
Atmospheric and descriptive writing, with a fair bit left to the imagination.
Oh and Aw...this touched me deeply. You had my full attention throughout and although I am extremely curious to know more, appreciate the coaxed imagination for the reader.
There's something about this MC that makes me want to wrap my arms around him. The voice is just perfect, it makes me think I know him. You did a great job with this one. Its definitely one of my favorites.
02/04/11
Loved it. I could almost feel myself in the MC's place. Congratulations!