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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Year(s) (01/20/11)

TITLE: Come, Dance with Me.
By
01/23/11


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Come, Dance with Me.

Dancing couples enhanced my mood.
Lights were dimmed and music subdued.

The man intrigued me, he sat alone
He was sensitive, single and smart
Would he consider a dance with me?

He looked at me, I looked away
Doubt disappeared, I met his gaze
He smiled at me, my heart missed a beat
Was it possible—was he the one?

He rose from his chair and strolled my way
I sat quite still, frozen in time
Lost in sweet thought and love sublime.

With a princely bow he took my hand
His eyes spoke volumes; I rose to dance
—a foretaste of love and romance.

DaNCe

Memories mingled with our dance.
Nothing ever happened by chance.

We married young; knew nothing of life
We lived simply, we loved each other
We knew we’d make it, without a doubt!

I dreamed your dreams, I knew your heart
Through the years we became as one
You taught me to love and cherish our faith
Dance with you?—for a lifetime, no less.

We nurtured our dance and learnt the moves
From Hip Hop kids to Break Dance teens
Developed and waltzed to new routines.

You showed me how to define our dance
With true love; the order of each day
We progressed to classical ballet.

DaNCe

Sands of time slip through the hourglass.
Neither age nor pain will end our dance.

We danced yesterday, we danced today
We’ll dance tomorrow, this dance of life
Bad years are few—but we took that chance.

Your true commitment never fails
You love me with a patient heart
You love me the way I am—I know
It has been that way right from the start.

In the stillness of the night, you hold me.
For always, I want to dance with you
Devotion and love are ours; it’s true.

Silent vibrations stir from within
Our years are of the highest degree
‘Cause I accepted—"Come, dance with me."

DaNCe



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Amy Michelle Wiley 01/28/11
Lovely poem, and nice rhythm. The fact that some stanzas rhymed and some didn't threw me off a bit, but perhaps it's a style I'm not familiar with.
Lyn Churchyard01/28/11
I like this. The rhythm a tiny bit out in a couple of spots, but the story behind the poem is wonderful. I could see it happening as I read...the orchestra, the princely bow, your head on his shoulder, the kiss in the moonlight... okay, so you didn't exactly say that, but I'm a romantic lol.
Glynis Becker 01/30/11
Such lovely imagery and the visual layout of the poem matches beautifully. I enjoyed it very much...guess I'm a romantic too!
Shelley Ledfors 01/31/11
Very sweet. I liked the theme of dance in looking at their love and lives together. I enjoyed reading this...thanks for sharing it!
Cheryl Harrison 01/31/11
I enjoyed the progression of your poem. I especially liked this line:

You showed me how to define our dance
With true love; the order of each day
We progressed to classical ballet.


Good job.

Brenda Rice 01/31/11
Beautiful imagery with a romantic mood, and an endearing message.
Eliza Evans 01/31/11
Cheryl picked out my favorite lines as well. Lovely.

Definitely romantic! :)
AnneRene' Capp 01/31/11
You had me sitting in that chair with my heart skipping a beat! Love your romantic heart and imagery of the dancing years.
Kate Oliver Webb01/31/11
Cheers for the out-of-the-box story and format! Very enjoyable story, although as with others, I found it a bit difficult when the rhythm caused me to stumble a bit. But then, I'm not very sophisticated with poetic styles, and I appreciate this chance to enlarge my experiences and interests.
Dee Yoder 01/31/11
Beautiful imagery and romantic interludes! Lovely. (:
Rachel Phelps01/31/11
Lovely romance. Sweet and nostalgic, a perfect balance.
Laury Hubrich 02/01/11
This is very romantic. I really like your little DaNCe between your stanzas. Very creative piece.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/01/11
I've tears in my eyes. This is a beautiful romance. It reminds me of the song, "May I have this dance for the Rest of my Life."