The Official Writing Challenge
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I agree with the latter part of the story, but I'm not sure that the mother wanting to stay in her house is equivalent to her being obsessed with earthly posessions. I'm not sure that her children necessarily know what's best for her either.

I think the moral of the story was great, but there seemed to be something missing between those two points.
I like this, you went in a different way than I expected. I could relate to the mc's feelings of uselessness. I'm glad you took the story in the direction you did, I need to not cling to possessions and past but look forward to what is to come.
01/25/11
I'm sure your story speaks to many on both sides of the situation. I liked your portrayal of the mother's change to being open to new possibilities. Well done.