The Official Writing Challenge
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01/16/11
A boy's coming of age in a poem. I like the way you transition the boy's love for his mother to his more mature love for his future mate. Lovely, really.
01/16/11
Great rhythm and I love the journey the mc goes through in so few words. Well done!
01/18/11
i enjoyed this poem :-) i liked the repetition of the non- rhyming small voice intruding into the rhyming couplets and breaking up the rhythm, very clever and in the last verse replacing the general with the Holy Spirit as the writer becomes aware of the true nature of that voice.
I really enjoyed this poetic ride. It gave me quite a bit of insight on the MC.Congratulations for placing 8th in level 3.