The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked your story and fit the topic very well. I liked how you tied the title in with the topic as well as how it really would be a rare occasion to meet up like that. I did notice a few little errors, but we all make them from time to time--I know I do, anyway.
01/17/11
great story... lots of lovely phrases.... and hopefully a happy ending. will the MC stop there now or carry on to persue her acting dreams?
01/19/11
Wow - what a story! I'd sure love to know what happens next!

You have a gift for writing. As such, you want to make it easy for your readers to follow your story. One thing that would help would be to put some "white space" between your paragraphs and dialogue. And watch your tenses, too, that they remain consistant throughout your piece.

I enjoyed this and look forward to seeing what you come up with next!