The Official Writing Challenge
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01/13/11
This was really good and had such a surprising ending! I immediately fell in love with the two children, my heart especially aching for Joey. You did such a good job of creating their characters with so few allowed words! Great job!
01/14/11
magical :-)
You made the magic so real, I could believe it.I love the story.
Nicely done fantasy-overlapping-a-fantasy! I had to wonder what the kids' adventure was like on that train. :-)

Very, very nice job. You deserve big time kudos for this one! Sweet, sweet kids!
I'll repeat what Diana said: Magical : ). The story is both transporting and endearing.
Very Disneyeske, in a Christian way of course. Very creative and engaging. You held my attention the entre way. Great story, well written. I know there are millions of children that would board the Lunar express.