The Official Writing Challenge
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This was masterful. I was so drawn into the story, hoping against hope, that Bessie's attitude toward the child had changed permanently. Alas, it wasn't! Excellent, excellent work!
This is a story that left me wanting to turn the page for more. Enjoyable read.
I was left feeling so sorry for Bessie. Winter brought spring to her heart and she was so far from Minnesota. Great story. Needs a novel built around it!
I was so hoping for a permanent change in Bessie! Your beautiful story showed clearly how a rare snow can affect the emotions like magic.
So sad, but compelling. I want to know more!
When the attitudinal switch flipped I felt a surge of hope for the future....and even though the end of your story didn't promise continuing breakthroughs, I was left with that hopeful glow! This was enticing, a little glimpse into the reality of human emotion and relationship when the participants are living out the process of discovery....and the possibility of redemption.
I didn't want the snow-magic that transformed her world to end. This is a beautiful story. It pulls on the heart-strings.
Very, very nice job. You deserve big time kudos for this one!
I enjoyed the connection between bessie and the snow. Must be hard moving from minnestoa to texas. i can see why your mc wanted to see snow again.
Beautifully written! It's so nice to be able to feel the sweet innocence of a 'baby girl' looking at the snowfall with surroundings as if in a magical land. Enjoyed the read.
Carol, congratulations on your Editor's Choice for this wonderful story!
This story tugs at my heart strings. So well written bringing the reader right into the story. Now I would love to read the rest...what happens next?
i'm very happy this one placed. I truly like it. Very well done.
Congrats Carol, great job!
I like how you showed Bessie was homesick. You didn't tell me, you laid it out line after beautifully written line. Congratulations on your EC, it truly was a masterpiece.