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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Flowers (10/03/05)

TITLE: Gentle On My Mind
By Paul Mobley
10/06/05


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Gentle On My Mind

Soft cooing of a dove,
a contented baby,
the purring of a kitten, and
a woman softly humming, in love.

Refreshing odors after a spring rain, and the
melodic trickle of a mountain stream.

The softness of early June grass, the
taste of a tomato fresh from the vine, and the
smell of meat cooking over an open fire.

The crashing melody of the seashore,
quiet snow on a December day.

A fledgling Robin trying it's new wings,
berries bending the mother briar,
fruit of the wild hickory tree,
shaded under a sweet smelling apple tree.

A pale moon casting its magic spell,
the sparkle of a million stars, as I
listening quietly to crickets harmony.

The evening smell of freshly cut hay,
a lonely little rosebud, and a
love lost seen through foggy glass.


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Suzanne R10/10/05
There's some beautiful imagery here. The love lost at the end was sad, and the lonely little rosebud was a lovely image of that too.
Alexandra Wilkin10/11/05
What a beautiful poem, like a secret little treasure to read when the days are long and tiring. Rich and evocative, yet as gentle on the mind as a cool summer breeze. An absolute pleasure to read. God bless.
Helga Doermer10/11/05
Lovely word images.
Linda Watson Owen10/11/05
Perfect title for this gem of a poem!
Cassie Memmer10/15/05
A refreshing mental getaway!
Deborah Porter 10/17/05
Hi Paul. I agree with all the commenters - this was a lovely poem. But I just wanted to let you know that unfortunately it was just a tiny bit under the minimum word count to be included in the judging. There is a minimum of 150 words, and a maximum of 750. Your entry came in at just 135 words - just a tiny bit too far under the minimum allowed. I'm really sorry about that. I hope you'll enter again in the future, but just keep the word count in mind. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)