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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Once in a Blue Moon (01/06/11)

TITLE: What Will It Take?
By Carol Penhorwood
01/09/11


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What Will It Take?

It happens, oh, so rarely
We join our voice as one,
The people band together
Demanding something done.

It happens, oh, so rarely
Americans agree,
And lifting a united voice
Our freedoms we decree.

Renouncing all divisions,
United we become,
Protection for our land we claim,
For all our land, not some.

It happens, oh, so rarely
In prayer we bow our knees,
When all across the USA
We humbly come to Thee.

The day was nine eleven
When focused we became,
Attacked, we recognized our need
And called upon Your name.

Churches filled their pews,
We lived in fear and doubt,
We even ran to give our blood
To help the needy out.

But nothing's ever lasting
And now we scream and yell,
Divisions sprouting once again,
Our own agendas sell.

It happens, oh, so rarely
That we in love unite,
That we put truth and honor first
And recognize our plight.

Founded on Your values
Our country could be proud,
But peace again will not be known
'Til on our knees we've bowed.


“If my people who are called by My name shall humble themselves, pray, seek, crave and require of necessity My face, and turn from their wicked ways, then will I hear from Heaven, forgive their sin, and heal their land.” II Chronicles 7:14 (Amplified Bible)



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Mona Purvis01/13/11
What a clear, timely message! The poetry is excellent in content and rhythm.
Benjamin Graber01/13/11
Good, timely message! We need to be unified in love, instead of fighting and bickering.
I felt that many of your rhymes sound forced. The use of "Thee" to rhyme sounds especially forced, when you use "Your" later on in the poem.
You've got some good lines; I like the one about our tendency to focus on selling our own agendas. May we learn to unite in love!
Lynda Schultz 01/13/11
Powerful message and good poetry too. The title begs for some serious thought from the reader.
Henry Clemmons01/14/11
Great poetic commentary. Your message came through loud and clear and in perfect meter. Very well constructed and told.
Lisa Johnson 01/14/11
This is an tremendous piece of poetry. It is flawless in its design, and the message is so relevant to today. Great job!
Mariane Holbrook01/14/11
Beautifully done! I especially like the last two lines, because it all depends on prayer, doesn't it? A lovely, well-crafted piece!
Kellie Henningsen01/15/11
Thought provoking, sadly so on topic, and well written! Great job!
Verna Cole Mitchell 01/15/11
Wonderful thoughts to illustrate the verse at the end.
Kate Oliver Webb01/15/11
As always, the truth comes through your beautiful verses, so well-crafted it absolutely flows like molten silver.
Heart-stirring, too; do you think we can ever learn this terribly important truth? I join you on your knees, humbly seeking the face of the Lord.
Thanks for sharing your gift once again.
Nanci Rubin01/15/11
I do so love poetry, my passion. This is a very timely message cushioned between your rhythmic lines and meter...The question you pose and then give the answer at the end. Well done my dear and your debut was smashing. Much enjoyed.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/15/11
It is so sad that it takes a tragedy to make a family join together. Some may want to disagree but our country is n much are a family. This is a true Masterpiece.
Carol Slider 01/15/11
So true: great tragedies like 9/11 often create a unity of mind and purpose that--unfortunately, in this sin-filled world--real, ordinary, day-to-day life cannot sustain. A timely message, beautifully written.
Beth Muehlhausen01/17/11
Yes....the question lingers...WHAT WILL it take? A thoughtful and thought-provoking poem; nicely done!
Pastor Proud01/18/11
I flew back from the States on 910 to my native England on the red-eye and got in to my office in time to see the terrible footage on TV.

Your poem brings that awful time back to the front of our minds. And it reminds us that people who have yet to find their faith in God come together in a spirit of common purpose and endeavour so rarely, yet so often in the most terrible of circumstances. That in itself suggests that God is gently trying to make His voice heard in all people. If only people would hear his voice in their normal daily lives.

Thank you for writing this.
Glynis Becker 01/18/11
A great challenge here to remember what unites us and not to concentrate on the divisions so much. Beautiful rhyme, great choice of words. This is fantastic!
diana kay01/19/11
Good one and lets hope and pray that tragedies such as 9/11 are truly not repeated. very profound and heartfelt poem written about such a important subject.... resonates clear as a bell.
Michael Throne01/19/11
Good poem. I loved the repetition and cadence. The point, especially in the title, was made well.
Connie Dixon01/19/11
There's a devotional hidden in this poem. Great job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/20/11
You did an excellent job with this powerful poem.Congratulations for placing in the top 15 of your level and the top 30 overall!