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12/16/10
Rich and emotive. The story is related very well; good descriptions and ambiance.
Very moving piece. You are succinct in extending emotion, clarity, while covering spans of time. I really appreciated your story.
beautiful piece of work with lots of rich comparisons and emotion
12/18/10
A moving view of an unending heartache, which you've told with open-heartedness and depth. Very powerful and credible.
This entry makes the reader "feel," which is a very good thing for a writer to be able to do. Excellently done.
Outstanding work that tugs at this readers heart.
12/19/10
This is a wonderful story on taking initial steps to overcome a child's fear with love. I feel sorry for Liz. How hard it can be to break vicious cycles! But patience and longsuffering are a big part of love. Thank you for this.
12/23/10
You did a beautiful job with the crafting of your words which revealed raw emotions, love, kindness and compassion for this little boy and the troubled sister. This piece stirred in me a genuine concern for the MC, which translates again into excellent writing.
This story is wonderful. I love the infusion of reality; we too often lean toward our pat Sunday School solutions. This story takes us beyond the expected and helps us own it. Well done!
12/29/10
Very nice. I had fun riding the bus of emotions you shared!