The Official Writing Challenge
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12/05/10
Interesting - practice for picking a juror, eh? Never thought of it quite that way.
12/05/10
Thanks for inviting us into the whole picture, which was so descriptive and so observant. I enjoyed the scope and the pace, which you have cleverly dotted with flashes of insight.
I must confess to some concern about the second daughter being "drug" rather than "dragged" along by her mother, but that may be a local idiom.
This was an interesting story. I really enjoyed the different nuances of the people in the mall. You did a great job with what I thought was a difficult topic.
Good job. Descriptions were great. I love El Chico's!
12/06/10
I like the connection between "several hours" and "record time." Funny. Great take on this week's topic. Okay, so WHO were those two lurking people anyway? Good, strong story.