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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Body Language (11/25/10)

TITLE: Not anymore
By Folakemi Emem-Akpan
12/01/10


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Not anymore



I stepped into the cool foyer, relieved to be home after a very long day of negotiations and tantrums. I could hear the faint whisper of a TV set, the dull roar of a toilet flushing, and Melinda’s snores.

These were the sounds of home, the sounds that I loved so much it made my heart ache. In the living room, George was multitasking as usual, watching the TV, IMing, doing his homework. He waved to me from his seat and went back to his chores.

My heart froze inside of me, like it did every night. There was a time he’d be flying across the room, a time when he would entwine his skinny arms around my neck and pepper my face with sweet little kisses. Not anymore.

In the hallway, I cracked open the door to Melinda’s room. She was fast asleep, curled in the fetal position, her mouth slightly open, the room awash with the pings and pongs of her snoring. There was a time she’d stay awake till I returned from work, her hair smelling of fruity shampoo, her mouth of toothpaste. The smell of girly innocence. Not anymore.

In our room, my wife came out of the bathroom when she heard the door. Her face was scrubbed clean of make-up, her hair pulled back into a ponytail, her body clad in a modest nightie. In the past, she would be wearing fresh make-up, would be wearing a see-through negligee, would be waiting with a chilled glass of wine. Not anymore.

The sad truth I had to live with was that it was all my fault.

“Hi there.” Betsy reached up on her tippy toes and planted a chaste kiss on my cheek. I wanted to hold her close, to lose myself in her, to be one with her as before. Instead, I replied with a hi of my own and dropped my suitcase on the floor. As I loosened my tie, she told me my dinner was sitting in the oven, could she warm it up for me.

Betsy still did all the things a wife should, only that they were now empty chores. She cooked, she cleaned, she listened when I spoke, and we still had a sex life albeit sporadic. Everything was there. Everything but joy.

I couldn’t remember when the process started, but it must have been when I got the promotion three years ago. I was working hard, then harder, then hardest than I had ever done in my lifetime. Motivated by thoughts of being able to provide my family with all that they desired, I took on more responsibility than I was assigned, got home later and later, was too tired to sit up with my children, too tired to listen to them, too tired to appreciate Betsy, too tired to be a family man.

They tried really hard. The children were extra careful not to fray my already frayed nerves, Betsy gave me rub-downs to ease the tension in my back and forearms. I receded further and further into myself.

They got the message. The children found lives separate from their father’s, my wife’s bubble laugher finally faded into nothingness. I buried myself up to the neck in work.

The food was served, the water was poured. Betsy slipped under the covers, her back unconsciously turned to me. I ate slowly, not because I was savoring the meal but because my mind was a whirlpool of thoughts. I wished I could turn back time. Yes I would still have taken the promotion. But no, I wouldn’t have allowed my job to consume me. I wouldn’t have pushed my family away. I wouldn’t have.

I cleared the plate without even tasting its content, washed the plate and tray with warm water, finally climbed into bed beside my wife.

Even though she was asleep, I held her and promised that I would change things.

She did not hear me. And perhaps she wouldn’t have cared.


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Nancy Bucca12/02/10
This story really kept my attention. At first it sounded as if some major incident - like a car crash -had caused the problems. Then I read what really happened and I hope that there can be a happy ending to this tragic tale.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/06/10
Every ounce of me wants to scream she would care. Her heart is breaking from loneliness and she doesn't know what she did wrong. I wish my husband had written this so that I had a clue that he still cared. This is a beautiful story and I have a single tear falling down my cheek.
Rachel Phelps12/06/10
The grim reality in this piece is gripping. I think I would have liked a little more conflict in action - him attempting a small reach out and it not being noticed or being misinterpreted. The message is a needed one. Well done.
Leola Ogle 12/07/10
What a stirring, poignant, all too true account of how we let the things most precious to us slip away. Very thought provoking!