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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Body Language (11/25/10)

TITLE: Fortified
By Benjamin Graber
12/01/10


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The crossing of your arms
Is like the drawing of a bridge,
The last defense to keep me out—
Your heart’s perfected hedge.

Your attitude declares,
“All trespassers beware!”
To pass your fortifications
Would take a hero’s heart to dare.

But he who has a heart
Can see what you really need;
The walls you built do nothing more
Than cage you in your grief.

You need compassion
To wear away your walls;
Eroding them with strokes of love
Until they finally fall;

A little love can do
What arrows never will,
And loose your heart from all the chains
As secret longings at last are filled.

Your arms will open up,
Unfastening your door;
Then ’cause someone has offered love
Your heart will blossom to the core.

Your attitude has changed,
A smile now lights your face
And welcomes all to enter in
To taste a bit of grace.


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Lollie Hofer 12/03/10
Great last line..."to taste a bit of grace." Nice rhythm and rhyme in this poem. You did a good job of using body language to reinforce the title.
Noel Mitaxa 12/04/10
Very descriptive imagery with very simple language; though I feel extra verses are needed as a clearer bridge to the positive change at the end.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/05/10
I could really relate to the first line. Whenever I see someone cross their arms I feel like they're screaming Go away! Nice job.