The Official Writing Challenge
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I love those "ah" that's why it frustrated her when he turned his back. I'm glad in the end she could see where they were a good fit for each other.
I suspected there would be a twist at the end, but I didn't expect that one. Great job holding on to the mystery.

I loved the way the MC's heart softened toward the end.
Certainly a lot of passion in this one. It all made sense in the end but I can't help thinking that it could have done with a few more hints scattered along the way. Isn't love (and forgiveness) a wonderful thing?!
As one of those wretched species called husbands, I was wondering how to make an objective comment. But your twist at the end drew me in. Nice build-up, and I did not mind the lack of clues along the way.
I really enjoyed this. I think it describes a lot of marriages. The ending was great.
Good job! I liked this line ... time is like money; it can only be spent once. Keep writing.