The Official Writing Challenge
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12/02/10
I have a good guess who wrote this, and it's a precious story. Great idea for this topic. Well done.
12/03/10
Wow! You ladies have got weddings really enbedded in your minds. Liked the Amy Sparrow bit. Enjoyed your interesting account. It's a winner for me - but who am I?
Very touching moments described here. I loved the added "gold-tooth" description. What can I say ... it's the little things. I have a feeling there is more than one chapter to this one. Keep writing!
12/03/10
Well, looks like we were all able to be at the wedding after all. Great descriptions of the event and its people. I loved the ending.
12/03/10
I liked this. Good descriptions.

One minor typo, but it didn't detract from the entry as a whole.

I smiled at the "Amy Sparrow" bit. :) I also liked the ending.
This was great! I didn't figure out the bride was deaf until quite aways into it but should have as the vibrations from movement and from the music coming up through the floor is a huge part of a deaf person's life. Very nice story!
I loved this story and did not even catch on that the bride is deaf. After second read, I saw "the sign"!
Loved the ending!
I like your creative idea for the topic. The ending is just right.
12/04/10
I also missed that she was deaf. But I was engrossed in catching every creatively arranged gesture and twitch. Excellent writing
12/04/10
You've built sublety within the depth of this very descriptive entry. I didn't at first catch on that Sara was deaf, but like others I just enjoyed the story. well done
12/05/10
From the reactions of the congregation, I expected to read that the bride was unclothed. LOVE the way it came out (but I still wonder at the shock and embarrassment of those watching her enter the church.) Great descriptions,and an awesome ending.
This is so beautiful. I loved the descriptions and could feel the love. Beautiful job.
12/05/10
Beautifully written. I like the way you described the details—it makes the story come alive in clear vividity. Excellent work!
Awww, sweet story. Liked all the little body language details.
12/07/10
I didn't catch on that anyone was deaf. I liked all the little references to body language sprinkled throughout the story. It makes me think of all the different ways we can encourage people outside of using words.
I love your descriptions. The little details were so important, from the pimpled-face cousin to the gold tooth and feeling the music vibrate through the floor--which is why Sara was bare footed I think. Excellent work!
I liked the way the detail was described. well done.