The Official Writing Challenge
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11/28/10
Interesting play.I really like to see them performed. Still remember seeing 'The Crucible' live.
For this one however, I felt the ending a tad forced. Don't worry though It's just my opinion and my last story had a similar problem.
11/29/10
Good drama. I could see it taking place on stage. The ending was a little rushed perhaps but still a good message.
I really enjoyed this especially the part where the little girl comes up with the answer. Often are children can be the wisest in the house, but sometimes parents don't have time to listen.

The ending seemed kind of sudden. Maybe if she had argued a bit before having her epiphany, but I know how the word count can often make a sudden ending necessary.

This is a great message and would be a great skit to do in church, many of all ages could learn from it. Nice job.