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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Cyber Communication (email, IM’s, etc) (11/04/10)

TITLE: T(oo) M(uch) I(nformation)
By Carol Penhorwood
11/10/10


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T(oo) M(uch) I(nformation)

Urgently needed, “Miss Manners”,
An etiquette book or two,
Updated for this modern age
Where “texts”, “emails” debut.

Electronic devices so common
Surround us wherever we go,
Divided attention is all we receive,
Responding to text's ebb and flow.

A “ten second rule” to read and respond
And no longer rude one will seem,
For interrupted dialogue's
Just part of this day's scene.

There's just one little problem
For some of us, you see,
We can't remember what's been said
Before your...“Excuse me.”

So then we would start over
And once again you text,
And so we while away our time
Wond'ring what you'll say next.

The next time you invite me
To have a cup of tea,
Perhaps a Kindle I will bring
While you AT&T.

I guess I must get used to this,
It's progress, so I'm told,
But conversation I prefer...
The kind from days of old.

But F(or) Y(our) I(nformation),
I've learned a thing or two,
I'll B(e) R(ight) B(ack) with L(ots) O(f) L(uck)
If I remember you.



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Beth LaBuff 11/12/10
Yes, you've captured the dilemma -- the texting while conversing with someone else. :) ...and I love this, "The next time you invite me -- To have a cup of tea, -- Perhaps a Kindle I will bring -- While you AT&T." This entry is clever and creative charged with electronic fun!

Verna Cole Mitchell 11/12/10
Clever and fun!
Henry Clemmons11/13/10
I have to applaud a creative poem. Great job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/13/10
It does seem everytime I get into a conversation with my teen daughter I hear the click click of her fingers speeding overthe keys. Maybe Ishould be proud that she xando two things at one time... Your poem really shows what life is like lately. Good job!
Gregory Kane11/14/10
Very good indeed
Caitlyn Meissner11/14/10
I enjoyed reading this poem. Good job!
Rachel Phelps11/16/10
Such fun!
Loren T. Lowery11/16/10
Isn't this the truth! I found myself nodding all the way through. Putting this to verse seemed to softened (but a bit) today's dilemma with cyber communication.
Susan Montaperto11/16/10
Very well done and creative look at the lack of "manners" in this cell phone/texting age. Thank you and God bless your writing.
Barbara Lynn Culler11/17/10
Well done, Carol! Love it!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/18/10
Congratulations for placing 14th in level 3!