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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Cyber Communication (email, IM’s, etc) (11/04/10)

TITLE: Fwd:
By Beth LaBuff
11/10/10


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In the outskirts of Miami, lived an artless lady— Tammy,
With her sphinx-like, tailless Manx she kept to cheer her simple soul.
Tammy, not a natural cutie, 'cause a birthmark marred her beauty,
Every evening 'twas her duty— to obscure it was her goal.
"A mark of beauty," some consoled, to boost her ego was their goal,
But she knew, 'twas just a mole.

At the day's end she retired, to check email, she desired,
Typed her username and password, made her nimble fingers flail.
Then she held her tailless Manx tight, as the last few rays of daylight
Made her world fade into twilight, as she downloaded email.
But no personal correspondence just two forwards in her mail,
"Only forwards!" was her wail.


----------Forwarded message----------------
From: Sandy
To: "Tammy@compmail.com"
Date: Tue, Nov 16, at 9:09 PM
Subject: FW: a Green Tip for Mole Control

If you're plagued by pesky moles,
Just declare a revolution,
To repel them, kitty litter
Is a practical solution.

No virus was found in this incoming email.


----------Forwarded message----------------
From: Georgie
To: "Tammy@compmail.com"
Date: Tue, Nov 16, at 9:15 PM
Subject: FW: My dear friend – Do not delete!

My dear friend, 'twould seem a drought
Because we haven't talked in years.
Be assured, you're thought about.
My dear friend, let's mend this drought.
I'll have you know, without a doubt,
That you my friend, I deem most dear.
My dear friend, 'twould seem a drought
Because we haven't talked in years.

Now send this email to ten friends
And then reply it back to me,
'Cause if you don't, our friendship ends.
Now send this email to ten friends.
A windfall prize on this depends,
Headed your way— A S A P.
Now send this email to ten friends
And then reply it back to me.

No virus was found in this incoming message.


***
With desire in her eyes, she wished to reap the windfall prize,
Quickly fired off the email to ten unsuspecting souls.
Then she grabbed the kitty litter, its blue crystals shone like glitter,
Used the gritty kitty litter, daubed in on her facial mole,
Used the clumping kitty litter, to obliterate her mole—
Last ditch hope for mole control.

The next morn she checked her email, what she saw 'bout made her face pale,
Ten replies in bold type titled, "My dear friend – Do not Delete."
Then she checked for mole removal, hoped to smile in her approval,
But her eyes flashed disapproval and her spirit was downbeat.
When no windfall prize transpired, her dejection was complete,
So she pressed the key — "Delete!"


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Verna Cole Mitchell 11/12/10
This very creative poem made me feel the longing of Tammy, even more than having her mole covered up, to have a real friend to communicate with her. This was "real." (I'm just glad the e-mail didnt say "If you don't send this on, you don't love Jesus!"
Mona Purvis11/13/10
Creative piece for sure. Skillful writing, good use of topic, entertaining, sad and yet fun at the same time. Very well done.
Henry Clemmons11/13/10
A mixtre of emotions created here. Great job, I enjoyed the creativity of the presentation and the masterful way it was pulled off and the message comunicated and ministered. Great job.
Edmond Ng 11/14/10
This is a pleasurable read! You are always so good at writing a story within a poem.
Laury Hubrich 11/14/10
Poor Tammy:( You really made us feel sad for her. Awesome writing, as always. Very creative.
Caitlyn Meissner11/14/10
It's funny what we'll do when something bothers us. Tammy's mole fixation made me smile. Good job!
Virgil Youngblood 11/14/10
A molecular masterpiece. Very enjoyable.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/14/10
This was a really cute poem that gave me a nice chuckle.
Catrina Bradley 11/15/10
Beth, I think this is your best work ever! Such a creative approach to the topic and the challenge, and, though I can't name the types of poetry, I recognize the talent necessary to seamlessly combine so many examples of well written verse. EXCELLENT! :-)
Rachel Phelps11/16/10
Beth, I am in awe of your poetic talent yet again. Such fun and such a smooth read. Great!
Loren T. Lowery11/16/10
Sigh, hope spring eternal - and there always is that delete option. I think you captured not the angst(too subtle a word here), but the true, deep sorrow of those who try (in vain) to boost their "ego" by use of the internet and -mails.
BTW, I really liked the cat too and that he was a Manx only made it that much more a believable companion to your MC)
Susan Montaperto11/16/10
A very creative rhyimg poem. It was great fun to read about Tammy and her cat, but also saddening. The internet seems to promise many things to many people, but it cannot mend or make whole broken hearts. God bless your writing.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/18/10
Congratulations for placing 12th in level 4 and 16th overall!
Carol Penhorwood 12/04/10
What a gift you have! 'Cuse me, I have to run out for some kitty litter.