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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Cyber Communication (email, IM’s, etc) (11/04/10)

TITLE: This is just to say
By Sarah Frase


This is just to say

thank you for that message
You left on my cell phone

that day

I wanted to write it down
and have it bronzed
like those friendly baby shoes
that we keep on the mantel

I wanted to have it interpreted
into an abstract painting
to hang on my wall always
Before family and strangers

I wanted it read at my funeral
and on my birthday
every year

I was so proud in that moment
ear pressed to the smooth plastic
only one hand on the wheel
I nearly went off the road-
to bury myself forever
in the ugly sticky flower bushes
and short wall of concrete and riveted steel
that divides the highway

but I would have died happy.

Your message-
I wanted to take it to Everest
and set it down solid-
next to the mountain
for a brief comparison in IMPACT

When I heard it
I felt strong
stronger than
than the iron walls
of the Titanic
who in-spite of all her rusticles
is still there

it would have been inside the cover
of my first book and my last-

but I pressed 7 instead of 9
and so your message left me

it went into that cosmic no place-
the vast wireless graveyard in the sky
where loved ones’ wishes
secret spy rendezvous
important work schedules
breakups filled with horrific accusations
missed calls
and wrong numbers never answered
all gather and greet each other like ghosts
passing solemnly through
the age of technology’s dead-letter office
in cloudy and light blue heavens

I didn't mean to do it

This is just to say
I got your message after all.

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Graham Starling11/11/10
Beautifully done. I loved the music in this, like a cheerfully gurgling stream. Ugly sticky flower bushes jarred a bit for me, but the rest was sooooo good. Thank-you for adding rusticles to my vocabulary and for singing a few moment's delight into my day.
Benjamin Graber11/11/10
Wow, this is incredible! The images are so powerful; the flow is so perfect! I hope you make it in the top 10 with this one!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/12/10
Oh I've done that before! But you can retrieve it as long as you don't hang up, but I think you have to stand upside down and push a complex mathematical equation :) Seriously though the poem was beautiful and the ending great.
Lollie Hofer11/12/10
I moaned outloud when I read the part about hitting that '7' button. Laughed outloud about going into the bushes. Well done. I have only one piece of red ink to give to you...HOW COULD YOU KEEP ME HANGING LIKE THIS...WHAT DID THE MESSAGE SAY? :)
Colin Nielsen11/13/10
Very well done. This is the kind of poetry I love to read. Now I could go through it and find all the hidden meaning and symbols as I'm sure there are many.
Noel Mitaxa 11/14/10
Let's see.. You are obviously over fifteen years old, or you wouldn't have pressed the wrong number. But I enjoyed the flow within the frustration. can you include what the message was in your next entry??? as I'd also like to know what it was...
Brenda Shipman 11/17/10
This is just to say...I love this. Clever, sweet, mysterious (we'll never know the message, but I'm glad you didn't reveal it), and unique take on the topic. Super!
Lillian Rhoades 11/18/10
WELL DESERVED! A truly out of the box and "out of sight"
Patricia Turner11/18/10
What else is there to say - but Congratulations on your outstanding entry and EC!!
Amanda Brogan11/18/10
Wow! All that just to say that you got someone's message? Yep, that's the life of a writer. ;) We love using a lot to say a little ... or maybe making something little mean a lot. You did just that with this entry.

Congrats on your win!
Connie Dixon11/18/10
Great job on this piece, you're style is very refreshing. Loved everything about it. Congrats on your first place EC. WoW!
Angela M. Baker-Bridge11/18/10
So much fun here...congratulations and thanks for the laugh :)
Caitlyn Meissner11/18/10
*laughs* This is great! I especially loved when you revealed that the message had been deleted. Oh, how often that happens! Congratulations on your win, and thanks for a fun read.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/18/10
Congratulations on your EC!
Glynis Becker11/19/10
Outstanding!! Well-deserved win. You had me right from the first line to the last!