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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Cyber Communication (email, IMís, etc) (11/04/10)

TITLE: Impulses
By Benjamin Graber
11/04/10


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Some stories start with impulses
Sent across a copper wire;
Electrons have been designated
To bear the sparks to start a fire!

Some stories start with impulses
That sprint their way around the world,
As words transformed to ones and zeroes
Into the cyberlands are hurled.

From one computer to another,
Observing careful etiquette,
The impulses will make their way
Across the boundless internet,

Then like a friend who knows heís welcome
The impulses slip in your room,
And bring a message to your heart
Which makes your cheeks so sweetly bloom!

Some impulses have broken lives
And caused a hand to move to soon,
But others have enriched the world
Or caused the footprints on the moon;

And some impulses, from a heart,
Have sparked impulses on a wire,
And these impulses, sent to you
Have played their role, and lit a fire.

A romance sparked with impulses,
A friendship spun in cyberlands;
Now time has woven us together
In a tapestry that God had planned.


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Troy Manning11/11/10
Nicely done! Enjoyed the playful use of technical jargon. :)
DK Landers11/11/10
Your poem has a nice rhythm and says a lot about impulses. I like how you wove the emotions together with technology, and then brought it all back to God.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/12/10
This is a lovely poem. Anyone who can rhyme etiquette with Internet is a genius in my book.

Light red ink- in the 3rd from last stanza the second to should be too.

This really is a beautiful piece of work. Poetry isn't always my favorite but your piece really touched me. Nicely done!
Lollie Hofer 11/12/10
Fun read...I like how you were able to bring God into as well.
Noel Mitaxa 11/14/10
I note you acted on the "impulse" to include your title in every verse. While this could have made the poem 'repetitititive,' you have stepped over that problem and given us variety and insight, with a light touch. Well done.
Brenda Rice 11/15/10
Very creative poem;good flow and easy to read. Good use of the topic also.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/18/10
Congratulations for placing 8th in level 3 and 22nd overall!