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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Gossip/Rumors (either or both) (10/28/10)

TITLE: Careless Words
By Carol Penhorwood
11/03/10


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Careless Words



Eyes tell the tale
Of hurts inflicted,
By careless words we've been convicted.

Confidences
Told to one,
But on they go and tales are spun.

“Have you heard...?”
Should raise red flags,
Be aware a loose tongue wags.

Such busy bees
Collecting nectar
To spread throughout the public sector.

Though camouflaged
As prayer requests,
Gossip's often still addressed.

Churning up
Discontent,
Left to ripen and ferment.

Words that ripple
Traveling on,
Wagging ears from night 'til dawn.

Like yeast in dough,
Minute amounts,
What damage done when tales recount!

Hidden treasures
To draw upon,
An ounce of “pro”, a pound of “con”.

Tiny pearls
Of information,
Sometimes shared with no foundation.

Judgment coming
For each word,
Implications we've inferred.

Eyes tell the tale
Of hurts inflicted,
By careless words we've been convicted.


“But I tell you that men will have to give account on the day of judgment for every careless word they have spoken. For by your words you will be acquitted, and by your words you will be condemned.” Matthew 12:36-37 (New International Version)



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Member Comments
Member Date
Virgil Youngblood 11/04/10
I like the way you presented this. Well done.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/04/10
You did a great job with a nice rhyme and a flowing meter.
Theresa Santy 11/04/10
I'm always thrilled when I come upon a poem in the challenge entries, and yours is no exception.

The words flowed by like a pleasant stream. Loved it.
Cheryl Harrison 11/08/10
This line speaks volumes:

Hidden treasures
To draw upon,
An ounce of “pro”, a pound of “con”.


Gossip rarely spins the positive side of anything. Great job!

Lollie Hofer 11/09/10
I liked your format and how the words flowed. The format and flow complimented each other. Beautifully done with a powerful message.
Rachel Phelps11/09/10
Some real gems of lines in here. Loved it!
Kate Oliver Webb11/10/10
As usual, your entry is a gem! Beautiful, artful--you put a poem together better than anyone I know, and I look forward to reading yours every time. I enjoy the message, of course, but your style stirs me as well.
Caitlyn Meissner11/10/10
I loved this line,

"Though camouflaged
As prayer requests,
Gossip's often still addressed."

That happens a lot in church. I'm glad you picked up on it. Great job!
Pam Carlson-Hetland11/10/10
Each verse holds a gem. My favorite is: "Churning Up Discontent Left to ripen and ferment" is such a word picture of stench that comes from "Carelss Words". Great job in writing this, Carol!
Amanda Brogan11/10/10
Wow! This is perfect for the topic! You did an amazing job with capturing the essence of gossip and rumors. The Bible verse at the end wraps it up very nicely.

Definitely a gem! :)
Patricia Turner11/10/10
Wonderful! This line was my favorite among so many - I'll say it too - gems!

An ounce of “pro”, a pound of “con”.

Love it!
Sarah Elisabeth 11/10/10
So very well done! Loved the cadence and the message was excellently conveyed
Nancy Sullivan 11/11/10
Congratulations, Carol. The content and the form on this one make it a special piece.
Verna Cole Mitchell 11/11/10
Congratulations on an excellent poem--highly commended--for sure!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/11/10
Congratulations for your high ranking!
Henry Clemmons11/11/10
Some great lines. Super talent. Loved the creative approach and the message. Congrats also on placement!
Edy T Johnson 11/15/10
Congratulations, Friend! This is wonderful poetry, right down to your selection of words. I can just chew on each one. My favorite lines:
Such busy bees
Collecting nectar
To spread throughout the public sector.