The Official Writing Challenge
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11/06/10
Great POV! I like how you showed what the MC was from your descriptions in the very first line. Very creative, and the last line - a keeper!
I loved this fresh approach. Children's stories have always been my favorites and you did a great job!
11/08/10
It's a modern-day Bambi! This was a cute story and ended with a great lesson on the danger of rumors. You really do an awesome job of bringing animals "to life" and getting the reader inside their furry heads.
11/08/10
Love, love, love!

This was just too good. Super cute with a great message!
11/08/10
This was so easy to read. Unique, fun and wise. It would make a gorgeous children's story. I did wonder why you didn't use paragraphs however - I think the flow would have been smoother if you had.
11/09/10
Such fun. I agree with others that it would make an excellent children's book. Great work!
I'm so glad the man didn't shoot her! I enjoyed this. Kept my attention all the way through.
11/10/10
Wonderfully creative take on this week's topic! I actually liked your format. It felt lighter and more conducive to children's reading. Loved it.
Teaching and entertainment at the same time--how much better can it get?
11/10/10
This is truly a masterpiece. I saw the fur, smelled the grass, felt the dew -- you really did it for me. And the message...well, it just couldn't get any better.
11/10/10
I found myself smiling throughout this entire story. It was fun to read with lots of action and likeable characters.
11/10/10
Very interesting take on the topic and a very enjoyable read. The way to get free from lies and rumors is certainly to flee.
I'm jumping on the bandwagon with the children's book idea. This is cute - so animals can gossip too. I'm glad the man let Violet go so she could live to tell us her story.