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11/04/10
Brilliant! Love the wry, self-deprecating humor of the MC and the way the phrasing style is repeated as she works things out logically.
11/05/10
I love how you skillfully, and repeatedly use aposiopesis with her thoughts, "...he wears some kind of sandalwood something that's reminiscent of the o—never mind." One of my favorite metaphors here is Amanda's lips and the "paper fortune teller" "open-long, open-wide." :) Your extended metaphor and title are superb, "the last square left in the casserole pan"… and I love that HE GETS IT… cause I don't think Amanda or Gina would.. :) You have great contrast between your Joss with her vulnerability and Amanda. And the name Noah with the supposed "ocean" tattoo made me smile. :)
11/07/10
What Beth said.
11/07/10
LOL.... :)
Seriously though, my favorite parts were the open wide, open long part. I actually stopped reading to take a moment to visualize this gossipy technique.

And i like that Guitar Boy gets it. Hope Joss helps him with his wardrobe a little bit, though.
11/07/10
I love the title! The metaphor is brilliant. You really drew me into your story.
11/08/10
Love the title - love that Guitar Boy "get's it", which is pretty unlikely in the real world. You make me laugh. Awesome.
11/08/10
I love the poetic/artistic voice of this piece. It's written with such skill and passion and truth. Great anology presented with the casserole. In these fast paced times I don't thnk cassaroles are cooked as much (at least not from frozen, where the melding of flavors can make richer the taste). The cassarole was perfect because it represented the melding of the true flvors and emtions of life in this story. Excellent!
11/08/10
This is brilliant. I loved every word!
11/08/10
I know a "Joss" who is very much like your character. I could not stop making the comparison. Wonderfully written with lots of "food for thought" ;)
11/08/10
I thought this was brilliant, even though I'm a little unsure how it fits the topic. I love the casserole analogy, too, having been to so many church potlucks. Great job!
11/08/10
Fabulous analogy - so well done. I really enjoyed this.
11/08/10
I just love how very descriptively you write, Lisa - his clothes, his scent, the wood of his guitar. It makes it all seem so very real! I also love Joss's internal thought process. Fantastic!
11/08/10
What a Master you are. 'Nuff said.
11/08/10
I want to disagree with the author, ... actually, I guess I can't, but how funny that so many of us "thought" he GOT IT! ;) LOL!
11/08/10
UN-BE-LIEVE-A-BLE!!! The syllogisms were great, especially the last one—where the logical girl’s desire for love overcomes her logic. Not only can she not spit out the conclusion (in the logical sense), her conclusion (in the emotional sense) is based on the logical fallacy of equivocation (since Guitar Boy didn’t get it)! And that is the brilliance of the analogy. Surely this girl would never make such a mistake, but for cupid’s arrow. Love gets us all! Hilarious!
11/08/10
Sensational. Nothing else to add
11/08/10
Boy O'Boy! I'm not suppose to covet, but this piece shows how far I am from Master's Level. A true out of the box approach! Great writing from beginning to a creative end.
11/08/10
Yes, I have to agree with Lillian. (I have such a LONGGGGG way to go.) This was absolutely masterful. I too have felt like "the last square left in the casserole pan". A winner for sure!
11/08/10
I think I'd put ditto marks after each of the wonderful comments for this piece. The title drew me in and the writing kept me reading. Need I say more! I'll look for this in the EC list.
11/08/10
I love how this saunters along just like GB - I think Joss is more of a match than she thinks. I'm glad he got the casserole deal too - a most supreme touch.
11/08/10
Unique writing, fresh and just plain fun to read. You made it so easy to be a 'fly on the wall' and experience it along with them. You're in the zone.

Mona
11/08/10
I like the way you approach this, especially with the three-liner assumed 'logic' coming in at the beginning and half way through about what the majority may possibly think. A great story and an interesting read.
11/09/10
Fabulous, my friend. Your characters are so alive - I envy your skill if I wasn't too busy enjoying every word. I wasn't sure if Noah was supposed to get it or not - glad to get the clarification. :)
11/11/10
Congratulations on your EC!
11/11/10
Congratulations, wonderful writing friend...(the wonderful was for both!) However you meant it, this is superb writing. I love your stories.
11/11/10
Congratulations. Another stellar entry from a one-in-a-million mind.
11/11/10
This was greatand well deserved of your win!
Loved the analogy of the fortune teller thingies. I knew exactlyly what you meant but did not know what you called those things!

I liked the way the MC would try to deny she likes guitar-boy but slip up with wistful thoughts!

Awesome job, Lisa!
11/11/10
I love this article. Such a unique analogy. You are an inspiration to beginners like me :)
11/11/10
Congratulations on your EC, Lisa!!!
11/11/10
Great job, Lisa! Nice compelling flow. Happy to see it received the recognition that it did. :)
11/11/10
I love Logics. Incredible story, great flow, likeable characters. Congratulations on your well-deserved recognition. (I have a friend who teaches a Logic class...gotta show her this story.)
11/11/10
Lisa, I just don't know how you do it. This is wonderful. Congratulations on the EC. You are so very special.
11/11/10
Congrats on your placing. Well-deserved! I love the way you've drawn your MC, in all her vulnerability. Almost as a twenty-eight year old teenager with a dash of spring fever thrown in. (Well its is spring down here...)
Your word pictures and characters launch off the screen and walk around the room. Very skilfully done.
11/12/10
Very well written. The gossip/rumour was really subtle - not out there at the front. I loved the three lined logic sequences, which struck me as not always that logical at all. I liked all the clues that made you think that she really did like Noah very much. I was a last square too - and found someone who loves last squares!
11/12/10
This is such a cute story! I wish there were an entire book and not just 750 words. I would buy it in a heartbeat. I can definitely picture Joss in my head, and could relate to her on so many levels, maybe because we are similar. I, too, am older than my husband. I was a logical girl who avoided attention at all costs and was certainly not looking for love; I was sure I was too "square" for my popular husband, who'd (of course) want someone peppy and bubbly and cute. Instead he chose the bookworm, for which I am eternally grateful. God works in mysterious ways. I love, love, loved this story.