The Official Writing Challenge
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11/04/10
The beginning took me back to school days when the teacher's lounge was an enigma. Even as an adult volunteer I was NetBoot about entering sacred ground. Then my heart bre for the MC. I knew the teachers would be talking about her family. The sadness I felt for her was palpable.
11/06/10
Took me back to school, too, remembering the holy ground of the teacher's lounge. Gripping story, and sad.
11/09/10
Sad story...you did a good job of pulling me in as a reader and feeling this young girl's pain. Junior High emotions especially are fragile. Probably a little too much swearing for my taste but that's probably just a preference thing. The overall quality of writing was good.