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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Gossip/Rumors (either or both) (10/28/10)

TITLE: OMG!!
By T. F. Chezum
10/31/10


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oh my gawd, you won’t believe
what I heard ‘bout you know who
readin’ posts on my friend’s blog,
so you know it must be true

it said she was at the mall,
prob’ly heistin’ some new shoes
suddenly the cops showed up
and arrested you know who

yesterday she blew off school,
makes me think it must be true
wonder what her friends think now
here’s the link for all to view

couldn’t keep this to myself
I was shocked to see the news
so I had to sent a text,
posted it on Facebook, too

so she’s just like all of us
makes mistakes she can’t undo
knock the princess off her throne
let her cook in her own stew

hope she gets what she deserves
after what she put me through
spreading gossip all ‘round school
‘bout my friends ‘n family, too

now she’ll learn it’s just not right,
if she even gets a clue,
hurting others just for fun
something I would never do


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Charla Diehl 11/04/10
This great poem was right on target for the topic. Good job.
Mona Purvis11/05/10
Perfect voice for the subject. This is very good on many levels.

Mona
Connie Dixon11/06/10
Your first sentence set the tone for the mc's voice and the words to follow. Good job!
Beth LaBuff 11/06/10
That first line just grabs ya. You have so many clever phrases and thoughts here. We don't always see the truth about ourselves. :) Great work!
Sarah Heywood11/06/10
Very enjoyable, although I cringed at the title. But, that is how teens talk today.
Clever writing!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/06/10
The title is perfect for this great little piece. You did an outstanding job.
Barbara Lynn Culler11/07/10
Loved this! Great job.
Cheryl Harrison 11/08/10
Great ending -- something I would never do! Good job showing that gossip is a temptation for everyone.
Gregory Kane11/08/10
I note with approval the lack of capitals - though I do wonder if you forgot with Facebook!
Rachel Phelps11/09/10
So fun, and so true. I love it when the message is delivered with a smile. Well done!
Caitlyn Meissner11/10/10
I, too, cringed at the first line and the title, but otherwise I enjoyed this poem. You gave it a great voice and flow. Good job!
Kate Oliver Webb11/10/10
This piece makes your point in a very unique and creative way. The last line nails it. Good job!
Lollie Hofer 11/10/10
Great rhythm and rhythme, along with a powerful message. You did a good job capturing the teen voice too. Well done.
Patricia Turner11/10/10
I like the meter in this and the tongue-in-cheek humor. Terrific!
Amanda Brogan11/10/10
I don't like repeating what OMG stands for, but this sounds just like something an average high-schooler might say. Complete with lack of capitalization of words and sentences. ;)

It might also be good for a rap song ...
AnneRene' Capp 11/11/10
Fun, realistic and clever!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/11/10
Congratulations for placing 14th in this level and 18th overall! Way to go my friend, I so enjoy reading your work:)
Tiara Huffman11/12/10
I loved it, and let me be the first to say I did not cringe at the title or first line. You are writing a piece from a teenagers mind, this is what they say and do, it's a reflection of the character not you. I know you don't go around saying omg or oh my god. It was a well written piece and I simply loved it!