The Official Writing Challenge
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11/04/10
This is heartwrenchingly eloquent. It shows perfectly the pain of betrayal by the false words of a so-called friend. Very well-titled.
Wow this is a powerful poem. You have excellent imagery in this piece.
Strong, strong message, given here in a very readable verse which simply drew me into the pain and frustration of the fruit of gossip.
11/06/10
Very powerful. Good strong words that show how sharp this kind of pain is. Great job!
11/09/10
Ouch! I felt the knife go in. You did a good job of expressing the betrayal...I could see and feel the agony.
11/11/10
Powerful first stanza that sets the stage for the rest of the poem. You have described the pain and hurt very poignantly. The hurt of a friend is much worse than that of an enemy.
Congratulations for placing 10th in this level!