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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Writing a Letter (handwritten correspondence) (10/21/10)

TITLE: Once Before Night Falls
By Lillian Rhoades
10/27/10


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You’ve been gone so long.

As twilight shuffles towards the darkness, I sit by the fire while memories of you light on my mind like hungry butterflies feverishly drinking from succulent sunflowers.

I remember the first time we met; you, me, and the morning. Dew glistened like shimmering silver, and eager spring leaves swayed with the breeze, vernal and fresh with promise.

And so were we.

I’ll never forget the day we waved a final goodbye to spring, and as summer settled in, we slipped away to where time seemed like the sum of all eternity. While sand trickled through our toes, we walked barefoot on the beach and looked out beyond the azure waters to distant shores and dimly defined horizons; the wind and the will-o’-the-wisp at our back.

Some days, we roamed the galaxies, and chased down the stars. We scooped them up, filled our hearts, and flooded our eyes with the ones that sparkled like diamonds; until one day we realized we had to let them go-except one. We released them to frolic in the meadows of Make–Believe where Humpty-Dumpty never falls, and cotton candy never melts;to romp on the Milky-Way where everyone is starry-eyed.

Our one star kept shining.

Late one afternoon, on a cool, crisp autumn day when we conversed like lovers over a hot cup of tea, you taught me what it meant to believe in myself, how to welcome the bumpy roads that shepherded me towards my destiny, how to let the star light the way.

My Dream Maker, you've been gone too long. Will you come again?

It’s evening now, and winter draws near. Shadows fall outside my window, and light from our star grows dim. Before the night enfolds me, I want to chase another star.

I want to dream once more.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/29/10
This is lovely and gently tugs at my heart.
Jeanne E Webster 10/30/10
I felt a lonely, haunting presence in this. It speaks from seeking peace from past events. The reader can sense the downcast spirit. Good writing and word flow except for a few punctuation errors. Blessings. :)
Jan Ackerson 11/01/10
Lyrical writing--quite melancholy.

This may have skirted the topic a bit--it reads more like an internal monologue than a letter.

The sense of longing is beautifully portrayed.
Lollie Hofer 11/01/10
Sweet dreams tonight, may the Dream Maker visit us all. Sweet dreams bring hope. I enjoyed the lyrical feel to this story.
Lollie Hofer 11/01/10
Funny! I shouldn't follow Jan. I don't read other people's comments until I write some...this is like the third time I've said similar things to Jan's. I'm not copying her...honest.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/04/10
Congratulations for placing 8th in level 3!