The Official Writing Challenge
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10/29/10
The flow of this poem was exceptional...the words beautiful...great use of this week's topic.
Beautiful but sad. Nicely done.
11/01/10
I like the difference. It drew me in. Sad though.
11/01/10
This poem is gorgeous!

I only felt that it suffered from a few too many commas.

Beautiful, beautiful word choices and imagery.
Congratulations for placing 3rd in your level!
11/04/10
Congratulations Jim. Deep work and well written. I'm surrounded by masterful Wordsmiths. A real and appreciated privilage.