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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Writing a Letter (handwritten correspondence) (10/21/10)

TITLE: On That Day
By Henry Clemmons
10/25/10


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Live life my lovely lady on that day,
When black is worn and shovels turn fresh ground;
I scribe, stand strong, allow our sons to play.

Old men in suits with books are bound to pray,
Lanterns will dim and light will not be found;
Live life my lovely lady on that day.

Young saints still wet with words will warn to reign,
Your ears will hear itís time to keep kids bound;
I scribe, stand strong, allow our sons to play.

For you, my wife, youíll want your hair to gray,
Donít let cold grief silence our childrenís sound;
Live life my lovely lady on that day,
I scribe, stand strong, allow our sons to play.

With ink and feathered quill I fight for life,
Not mine, you see, but yours and Lukeís and Paulís;
Donít buy the lie I died and stole your light.

With string and skin and twigs I built a kite,
It needs to fly in sunlit days of fall;
With ink and feathered quill I fight for life.

Donít veil your heart and lose our hope of flight,
Remember sure the power of our call;
Donít buy the lie I died and stole your light.

Some eyes will moist and yours might wish to cry,
I write my prayer for strength where boys stretch tall,
With ink and feathered quill I fight for life;
Donít buy the lie I died and stole your light.

I scribe, stand strong, allow our sons to play;
Live life my lovely lady on that day.


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Virgil Youngblood 10/28/10
Poetry is not my thing, but this is excellent with a great message. Well done.
Lollie Hofer 10/29/10
Absolutely beautiful...the flow, the thoughst, the words. Exceptionally well done. I've attempted a villanelle (sp?) but have never succeeded, at least I think that's the name of the style.
Rachel Phelps10/29/10
I'm not a poet, but this is truly excellent. Fabulous wordsmithing here.
Amy Michelle Wiley 10/30/10
I had to read this several times to get it all, and some of it seemed difficult to grasp, but there are some beautiful imageries here, with a touching message.
Barbara Lynn Culler10/30/10
Lovely word smithing here and brings up many images, but I don't understand what is being portrayed with these words.
Verna Cole Mitchell 10/30/10
You have a gifted pen--great images and word selection here.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/30/10
Beautiful. It gave me chills.
Mona Purvis10/30/10
Are you sure you're born in this century? Your eloquence would say otherwise. Read it three times, will read again. To read it is to experience it, soft, sad, sweet, lovely.
You have wonderful ability to write this verse style as no other I've read.

Mona
Troy Manning10/30/10
Very nice facility w/ words demonstrated here. While there may be a fair amount of the subject-matter I'm not grasping, that doesn't tend to be the driving criterion for my own work let alone for that of others. Nicely done! :)
Nancy Sullivan 10/30/10
A agree that your message of unselfish love and that life is for the living was very strong. Beautiful.
T. F. Chezum10/30/10
Beautifully written. You are a gifted poet.
Lyn Churchyard10/31/10
I can only echo what others have said about the craftsmanship of this poem. A very different take on the topic. Well done!
Connie Dixon10/31/10
Amazing writing. You have a gift indeed.
Philippa Geaney 11/01/10
I didn't understand your amazing arrangement of words-until I read the comments, then it made beaufiful sense.
You seem to have picked up the pulse of another era.
An era of deep and profound writing.
What can I say?
Hitherwards we have the Bard.
Jan Ackerson 11/01/10
Breathtakingly beautiful!
Amanda Brogan11/01/10
This is very deep ...
Beth LaBuff 11/01/10
You've not only attempted this difficult poetic form you've mastered it. I love your alliteration. Your work in this is exquisite!
Amanda Brogan11/04/10
Congrats on your awesome win! Way to go! :D
Lollie Hofer 11/04/10
I've left one note already but had to leave another...congratulations on your well deserved recognition.
Benjamin Graber11/04/10
As a fellow poet, I must applaud you and say that I really love the works of your pen! Great job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/04/10
Congratulations on your EC!
william price11/04/10
Congrats, Henry. great to see your work recognized. God bless.
c clemons11/05/10
Nicely done but one verse definitely confuses the reader, the one where Luke and Paul is referenced. Not my cup tea but I'm sure you don't care.
c clemons11/05/10
**are referenced**
Cherry Bieber11/07/10
What an excellent piece! I Love poetry like this! Thank you!