The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed your story. I liked the twist @ the end (though the attendant's comment seemed a bit odd). Great title, btw. Solid writing throughout.
This is such a sweet story. You did take me by surprise at the end. Nice job.
10/24/10
Interesting story well written. Certainly out of the box with the finish: 'face to face!'
So sad. I have tears.

It would have been good to have a breaker line before the ending to indicate passage of time.

So sweet a story.
One of the most poignant stories of all this week--beauifully written.
10/26/10
Oh, the ending caught me by surprise! This was touching - thanks for writing it.
Very well done. Touching, sad. emotional with an excellent ending
Congratulations for placing 14th in level 4 and 33 overall! Way to go! :)