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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Conversation (face to face) (10/07/10)

TITLE: What They Said; What They Meant
By Donna Emery
10/20/10


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Good morning, Harry.
Maybe if I speak loudly enough, heíll pay attention to me. I dread asking him for money, but our living room curtains are falling apart.

Morning, Gladys
What does SHE want this morning? It had better not be moneyÖ

Can I get you some breakfast, Harry?
Maybe if I make him a nice breakfast it will be easier to tell him about the curtains. They were so bright and beautiful when we bought them, but now theyíre sagging open and look worn out.

No, thanks. I have a breakfast meeting at work.
Like Iím gonna eat that slop she calls cooking. Iíll stop somewhere on the way. I surely donít want to spend any more time here; sheíll just ask for money for something.

That sounds interesting. What would you like for dinner tonight?
Well, he doesnít want breakfast, but Iíll have to get his attention somehow. Iíve repaired those curtains so often, but time has worn down the fabric and theyíve collected so much dust I canít see through them.

I donít care. Surprise me.
Everything you make tastes like Styrofoam Helper anyway. Why does she keep looking at the curtains?

Donít forget; Joey has a softball game tonight.
He never pays attention to me anymore. I donít know what to do. Maybe if I talk about the kidsÖ

Iíll see if I can make it.
That kid is so pathetic. How can a guy like me have a son like that?

Honey. Please look at me.
This is awful. God, please help us. Please work in our hearts and heal our marriage. We canít go on this way.

OK. Iím looking. What do you want?
What does she want Ė and whatís it gonna cost me this time?

Harry, I donít want us to be this way. Do you remember how it was when we were first married? Weíve both changed so much. Letís get some help before itís too late.
Please, God. Please help us. Weíre kind of like those curtains; we used to be beautiful and new. Now, weíre worn and torn apart and beyond our own efforts to repair.

Yeah, OK Gladys. Whatever you say. Iíve got to go to work.
I guess sheís right about us being different. I know God can do anything, so maybe He can fix this. Iíll deal with it after work.

Have a good day, honey.
God bless you, Harry. Iíll be praying today. Just like the curtains, our marriage needs to be made new.

Yeah, thanks. You, too. Donít worry; weíll work it out.
Thanks. You, too. Donít worry; with Godís help, weíll work it out.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/24/10
I like this conversation. At some point they both appear to be on the same page but it's obvious their marriage is barely holding on. I liked reading their real thoughts underneath the words.
Sarah Heywood10/26/10
This is interesting. But I was pleased to see Harry's willingness to admit that their marriage needs some help and intervention. I also like your line about how their marriage is like the curtains - and really, as the reader gets into the piece, he can quickly see that while the curtains are the surface issue, things go much deeper.

I enjoyed this - good writing!