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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Conversation (face to face) (10/07/10)

TITLE: Turning from Abuse
By Judy Lawhon
10/12/10


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He said she was pretty,
he said she was sweet.
Then over and over,
her body he beat.

He said he was sorry,
he’d not do it again.
But over and over
he caused her such pain.

If only she’d clean more,
if only she’d cry less.
It was all her fault
they were in such a mess.

She believed what he told her.
She believed all the lies.
“God where are you?”
late at night she cried.

The woman next door
saw the bruises and marks.
And invited her to join her for
a walk in the park.

They talked about the weather
They talked about the kids.
They agreed to meet often,
and that’s what they did.

She trusted her neighbor,
and when she feared for her life.
She called and said, “please help me
to get out of this strife.”

To the shelter they hurried,
To safety from fear.
Others who understood
kept her near.

And they helped her begin a life
without pain and shame.
Told her God loved her so much,
and she wasn’t to blame.

It wasn’t easy to trust Him.
She’d been hurt by humans so often.
But time is a healer,
and her heart began to soften.

She called her neighbor
And said, “I thank you for caring.
You gave me the courage
to do something daring.”

"You showed me God’s way,
you were patient and kind.
From our talks in the park,
I left abuse behind."


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Carol Penhorwood 10/21/10
A truly heart-rending story that portrays a life redeemed.
Lollie Hofer 10/21/10
Good story told told in the poetic form. Thanks for sharing...all it takes is one person caring enough to change a life.
Jeanne E Webster 10/21/10
Abuse is not to be tolerated...period. Supporting those in need is a mandate under the heading of "Love one another." Your story connected it very well. A good article for support groups. Blessings :)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/21/10
This is a touching poem on a difficult topic. You did a great job pulling me into the verse and hoping the MC find her way.
Genia Gilbert10/25/10
This is a good story in poetry format. It's a reminder of how important it can be to talk to those we meet and reach out to needs.
Jan Ackerson 10/26/10
Your first stanza is a perfect 'hook' to get your readers to want to read on.

Your meter was 'off' in a few places; I'd love to see it evened out, to give this moving poem a more consistent flow.

A wonderful confirmation of the power of friendship.