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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Conversation (face to face) (10/07/10)

TITLE: United Minds
By Benjamin Graber
10/11/10


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Two swamps of thought stand silent,
Each living in a different plane:
One festers with mosquitoes,
The other polluted by a drain.

Each separate world of dormancy,
Is a plot for algae to expand;
The deadness of our selfish minds
Will make a graveyard of our plans.

If we remain two separate ponds
Our lives shall lie in poisoned waste,
For we weren’t meant to live alone
In ordered cells by walls encased.

This is stagnation.

Two streams of thought dance noisily
And run together in delight,
This causes a splashing, churning mess,
And sometimes a tumbling, rumbling fight;

But in the chaos there is life,
The jumble will unite our course;
We learn, we grow, and bloom with joy,
Our hearts are knitted here by force!

Where love provides the gravity,
Our hearts are pulled to this extreme:
Where two mentalities existed
There now remains a single stream.

This is conversation.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/21/10
You did a great job of painting such a vivid picture. I loved the way you illustrated how easily it is to stagnate when separated from others.
Lollie Hofer 10/21/10
I like how visual your words are. I also liked the contrast. (The message made me think of the poem, "No Man Is An Island.")
Jeanne E Webster 10/21/10
Well described contrasts, becoming one for the sake of the whole. Enjoyed your efforts very much. Most unusual work. Blessings :)
stanley Bednarz 10/21/10
Loved it. Excellent thoughts.
Genia Gilbert10/25/10
This is very enjoyable. I like the title very much, as well as your good illustration of it.
Jan Ackerson 10/25/10
Superb extended metaphors...love it!
Amanda Brogan10/28/10
Wow! Beautiful and creative as usual. Congrats on your third place win! :D
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/28/10
Congratulations on being an Editor's Choice!
Beth LaBuff 10/28/10
Benjamin, This is superb! Super congratulations on your Editor's Choice ribbon!
Henry Clemmons10/28/10
Wow. I know I should use a more scholarly word, but I am blown away by the depth and passion, not to mention the skill and anointing present in your entry. Great job and sincere congratulations on your placement.
Rachel Phelps10/28/10
Amazing. Congrats on the EC!