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This is done wonderfully. I thought he might find a way out but I wasn't sure. You did a wonderful job with the suspense and the perfect amount of tension. Excellent writing!
You drew me in and left me wanting to hear more. Well done!
Whoa, dude (or dudette). Gripping, suspenceful, great voice for your mc...all of it put together made for a compelling story. Yeah, Jesus! I liked how that little act of kindness made the difference.
Loved this story! You packed a lot in few words. I was captivated and couldn't wait to see the end. Great character development for such a short word limit.
This is gripping, and with a great ending. Building up to the "conversation" was a perfect idea.
Great job of building up suspense.

It's funny, but the last part, seemed to lose momentum for me. I wanted to feel that Susie was in more danger...a shorter falling action after the climax, I think, might have worked better.

This is one of the most interesting characters I've read this week.
Wow! You certainly built up the suspense. The only thing lacking for me (and maybe I need to just re-read it) is the motivation for Rick's desire to murder everyone. My guess would be that if someone were plotting such a thing, his reasons for doing so would be foremost in his mind. But maybe Rick just wanted to be noticed.

I'm thankful a way out was found in the end! Good writing!
Congratulations for placing 9th in level 3 and 21st overall!