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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Hotel/Motel (09/12/05)

TITLE: Room 157
By Jan Warrick
09/17/05


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Thursday

“What ya doing mom?” Riley asked as he jumped onto the bed.

“I’m writing a note sweetie,” Corrine said.

He wiggled up beside her. He loved his mom’s hugs. Smiling she wrapped her arms around him.

“I’m not sure who I’m writing this to. I just know I need to write it.”

“Mom, that’s silly. Why are you writing a note if you don’t know who to give it to?”

Corrine giggled. “Yeah I guess that does sound a little silly doesn’t it?”

Riley nodded.

“Honey I don’t know who to give it to, but I know where to put it so someone can find it.”

“Where ya gonna put it mom?”

“I’m going to put it in the Bible in that bedside drawer. That way, the next person who uses this hotel room might find it and read it.”

“Oh!” Riley exclaimed. “Like our treasure hunts at home. You hide notes and I have to find them and read them to find my presents.”

“Exactly. Maybe this note will help someone find what they are looking for.”

She finished her note, stuck it in the Bible, and put it in the bedside drawer.

“Lord, let these simple words touch the one who needs it most,” she prayed.

Friday

Standing in the shower Jessica let the water run over her body. No matter how much she scrubbed, she never felt clean. Frustrated she shut off the water.

“I don’t even know why I shower anymore.” she grumbled.

After drying she hung up the towel for the fifth time that night.

“I should remember to ask for extra towels when I check in,” she reminded herself.

Flopping down on the bed she glanced at the clock. Her next client wasn’t due for 30 minutes.

Opening the bedside drawer, she picked up the cash she had made.

“Got to find a better place to hide this.”

Picking up the Bible she considered hiding it there.

“No, there has got to be a better place than this.”

Setting the Bible on the bed she walked to the closet.

“Perfect.”

She hid the money behind the iron, chose another négligée and slipped it on.

Loud pounding on the door startled her.

“Hold on a minute!” she shouted as she closed the closet doors. “You’re early.”

Walking to the door she unfastened the locks and turned the handle. The door exploded open knocking her backwards. A man burst through the doorway.

Grabbing her by the throat with one hand he punched her in the gut with his other.

“Where is it?!” he snarled.

“I don’t know what you’re talking about” she wheezed.

He threw her on the bed; the Bible flew to the floor. Pulling a knife he held it to her throat.

“I’ll kill you! Where’s the cash!?”

He dug the tip of the knife into her throat. She felt an ooze of blood escape from her skin.

“It ain’t worth diein’ over” he hissed. I ain’t gonna ask again.”

She knew he meant it.

“It’s in the closet, behind the iron.”

Punching her in the face he growled, “Never make me ask more than once.”

He walked to the closet, gathered the money and left the room.

Stunned she got up and closed the door. She winced as she touched the bruised knot growing on her left cheek. As she walked to the bed she stumbled over the Bible.

“Fat lot of good you did me!” she yelled as she kicked it across the floor.

As it tumbled, a paper escaped its pages and floated to the ground. Curious she picked it up.

I don’t know you or why you are in this hotel room. What I do know is that there is a reason God has allowed you to find this note. He wants you to know He loves you very much. No matter what you have done in life, or what has happened to you He wants you to know that He is there for you. He wants to wash you clean. The best way to learn about Him is to read this Bible. Start with the book of John. I pray that God will reveal Himself to you.

“God,” Jessica whispered, “Can you really make me feel clean again?”

A tear escaped from her eye.

“Show yourself to me if you are here.”

Her hands shook as she picked up the Bible and opened it.


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Anita Neuman09/19/05
I love how you tied in the aspect of being clean. Beautiful.
Jan Ackerson 09/21/05
Wonderful, well-written story. There are several sentences that need commas, but that's a minor detail. You've done a great job of showing us Jessica's desperation.
Debra Brand09/22/05
Made me cry. Excellent.
Suzanne R09/22/05
Very touching. Well done.
Pat Guy 09/22/05
Really good! Held me till the end..... and believable. Great job!
janet rubin09/22/05
Wonderful. An enjoyable read.
Phyllis Inniss 09/23/05
Great entry. Jessica's need to feel again was answered right there in the Bible.
Donnah Cole09/23/05
Great illustration of how God works in mysterious and subtle ways sometimes! Nice flow, making an easy read.
Shari Armstrong 09/23/05
I got chills when I finished this one - wonderfully done!
Julianne Jones09/25/05
Very well done. I liked the link between the two stories. Thanks for sharing.
Sharon Cleveland09/25/05
The story holds the reader's interest until the end. The main impact for me is how important it is to be obedient.